Ill blow u up
 

I wana blow up dis game//
But when I do ya'll will wana do the same//
All you guys want is fortune and fame//
Your just same lame assed noone wid a fucked up name//
ur trying to spit ur shit but u choke...shame//
u gave head to another guy.....he neva came//
This shows u, u r so fuckin lame//
u cdnt fit it in ur hand//
Cos u cant stretch it out as ur piece is so small//
But ur so fuckin tall?//
If you take me out on a shopping spree in the mall//
And always catch me when I fall//
I might fall for u// It sumink relitavley new//
And ill continue if I get feedback ( Tell me if u thinks its shit, ta xxx) **MWAH**

not to badd but u need to stop wit the cum lines i mean c'mon u tried that shyt in our battle.........................but overall good stuff

i didnt like it u need 2 work on ur vocab and flw and srtucture and multis but ok verse how long have been rhymin

:(, hehe not long atall, I cant rhyme but I try hehe, some of ma mates said to sign up o I did.....Thanks for ya honest opinion :)

u can rhyme u jus need to elavate cmon ellen u no u can
xXx

u need 2 elevate n ya vocab was down u coulda did this betta