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King Solo 05-19-04 09:01 PM

Revenge
 
REVENGE

You wanna know why I’m lying here dead with this gun
It started when my parents used to beat my ass just for fun
Kicking me out the house like I’m a fucking little mutt
Now my dads an alcoholic and my moms a dirty slut
Turned me into a psycho lunatic putting my ass in the fuckin pen
Just out of prison causing first degree murder, I’m going back again
Yea I’m a damn convict but do I really give a fuck
NO…I just killed a guy and then stole his fuckin truck
So now I’m driving down the highway pissed out of my fuckin head
I just ran over some lady…………that’s another person dead
Oh shit there’s my house; I can see it clearly in my view
“Hey Mom! Hey Dad! I’m coming to kill the both of you!!”
“I spent months scheming now let’s get the blood streaming”
“What…u want me to let you go, you must be fuckin dreaming”
“I bet you enjoyed beating my ass and for that there’s no redeeming”
“Now shut the fuck up!! Stop with all the god damn screaming!!”
“Get what’s coming to you both. Prepare to fucking die!!”
“Oh I’m sorry mom………I didn’t mean to make you cry.”
“But you dad, you got off on beating me you were the fucking worst”
“You ain’t so tough now are you dad, feel this fuckin shotgun burst”
*BANG* “Can’t say shit now can you dad it’s cuz ure fuckin dead
“And mom I ain’t gonna shoot you……I’m a cut ure throat instead.”
I pulled out my knife it was already stained with the blood colour red
Then I slit my moms throat, stood back and watched as it bled
And now we’re back to the beginning as I dropped the damn knife
Then placed the gun barrel against my head and took my own life.

King Solo 05-19-04 11:14 PM

Feedback Playaz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

PoTeNtIaL 05-19-04 11:30 PM

7/10 ....the rhymes were alryte...but what wuz good about dis piece wuz the emotion of it...it wuz kinda in between comedy and sadness which made it bettter... the endings wuz pretty good 2, but kinda predictable...dus wuz pretty alryte,jus put some more voab in it and better rhymes in. good job...return the favor on aspirations plez......

King Solo 05-20-04 05:09 AM

aight playa i got chu
get some more feedback

Beyond Logic 05-20-04 06:33 AM

i like how it was deep and it wasn't just another gun play verse but the flow was a little off. it was more like a poem then a verse

Soul Sickness 05-20-04 09:29 AM

thats some deep shyt i give it an 7.5/10 it needed a lil more work on wordplay but it was some serious shyt so i cant dis it props keep spittin.......

King Solo 05-20-04 10:22 AM

more feedback please!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Ez-nyce 05-20-04 02:45 PM

shit was wack mothafucka step yo game up...if u have a problem wit wat I said battle nicca...............

King Solo 05-21-04 11:03 AM

mo' feedback ma'fuckas

pimp rawb 05-21-04 01:34 PM

Hot Tigth Ass Story Allough I Prefered Tha Otha 1 About cERIAL KILLERS jUST a lIL bETTER

King Solo 05-23-04 07:38 AM

feedback playaz!!!!


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