'Deranged'
Kam-K: 'Deranged'
Tommy grew up yo to home on the range to tommy bein homeless never really seemed to strange he used to hustle in city, by 4th avenue block the only thing he knew was how gain weight with some rocks but he keept his glock cocked, straight up he hated his place and everybody looked on, knew his life was a disgrace but tommy pushed on, figured this was his life order and if anything went wrong, hes flyin straight across the border but shit fell apart, as most shit tends to do tommys sellin to a undercover, what the fucks he supposed to do so tosses his shit, runnin so he ain't caught but in a minute the only thing he'll here is the sound of shots and the bystanders said that it that was tommy's fault and now hes bein burned up to join the soil and the salt its deranged motherfucker its deranged now ricky 'ray' ricardo had a love for cocaine chillen on the corner, it was his favorite thing to slang but drug dealin is something thatll get ya up in a mix hangin with the wrong crowd, will end you up in a fix so one day ricky ray decides to skimp the wrong man and in a week he ends up in the back of a black van and he wonders to him self how it happen so fast they came out, and clocked his ass, it happen so fast but the hard way seemed to be destine for ricky he slowly realizes his situation is gettin very sticky and when the van pulls to a stop he feels his heart drop its dark at the top of hill behind the old auto shop as they pulled him out ray gets a glimpse of the bat it only took a few whacks, to break his fucking knee caps and those motherfuckers didn't even notice he was'nt dead they shouldve seen his eyes were open when they bashed in his head this the kind of shit thatll happen in the game you cant be scared motherfucker, itll drive you insane, it's deranged |
ummmmmmmm i hate it man that was really really bad
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not to good i go with 4/10 u need to get some posts and get some wins and first of all go to tutorials and learn how to flow and make multis and shyt.....
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wack wack wack ^^ listen to him cuz dat nigga can spit
try again stay up |
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sound like some everclear shit
but i guess its clever for a bitch just playin yo, dont take it personal just sayin shit, cause im implacable |
yea i mean no disrespect kid i liked the story but the way u did it wasnt to good ya kno so jus work on it and keep elvation iight.....
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Mafia Soldier
If u were an old man tellin it to his grandchildren it would be good!! But seriously u need some work on tha flow!!
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