Freestyle
 

Yall know with my rhymes, that im top-notch with the beat...
Runnin over kids playin Hop-Scotch in the streets...
When i roll by, check you're lock-box and the key...
But i still got you're car, it's in the chop-shop for the week...
Be careful when im around, but when im not dont be careless...
Cause you'll still get jacked if you decide to share shit...
Insurance or not, either way its not fun...
Just like you're son or you're wife, either way i shot one...
I beat up six people at school, and their was no one suspended...
Odd that i go to Columbine, oh, no pun intended...


Just a lil freestyle for fun...

ok... good feedback...

Nice
 

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Dat was hot..i was feelin the flow and the rhythm... keep em coming

My Turn
 

undefinedundefinedundefinedJust a little fun of my own.
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I neva slow down im a lyrical clown
and when i come around bitch i tear up da town
shaking da ground and makin it pound
dont know why you frown dats just how i get down
i pump da bass into ya face i know you likin my sound
im like a wind-up toy dats permanently wound
spitting out rhymes like a merry-go-round
betta get a lifeguard cuz im makin ya drown
suffocate you with sound
my rhymes is colorful like a crayola crown
and da flow is buried in me it just has ta be found
investigate dese lyrics wit a cop and a hound
i put da adverb wit da verb da adjective wit da noun
im da king of rhythm so just gimme da crown.................
--------------needs feedback yall............................

it was ok but it needed a lot of work as for werline it was ok but def needs madd work before it can become nething to amazing.....both need to work on multis and flow so that u can elevate a games..............