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.::Re$tricted Vs. Unholy Wun::.(Topical)
.::Re$tricted Vs. Unholy Wun::. TOPIC: Spy In Iraq ::.Rules.:: 30 Lines Max 5 Votez Winz No Crew No Hate No D/R Votes Spits Due Before Midnight .::Good Luck::. Checkity Check ~R~ |
Sry check.
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Spy In Iraq:
1200 Hours as the Chopper Drops me at the Iraqi Base.. Hiden in some Bush's Night Vision Goggle's on my Face.. I Have Little Time to Get the Date and Get to the Rendevou.. Gather Intellegince and Any Info on the Rebel Crew.. As i Infilltrate the Encampment i Find Myself in a Store Room.. I Take a Peak out and see the Saddend Faces of Gloom.. There not fighting there Fight but the Fight for The Dictator.. I Must Move to the Main HQ Quikly By 1300 and No Later.. As i Move Across the CourtYard i hear a Voice of Hate.. They Knock me to the Ground screamin is Death My Fate.. Tied to a Bar by My Arms in a Small Stone and Mud Shack.. They cut me Down and put a Hood over my Head it's no Black.. As im Put in a Car which Smell's of Old Gas and Corroding Rust.. They Throw me out and Speed of as i lay Still in the Dust.. I Rise to my feet and Find Myself on the Enemy Boarder.. Luckily i hide the Information in my Boot now i must Follow the last Order.. I Run all out to make it to the My Leave at the Extraction.. As i Gave the Information to the Gen. I was Satified with his Reaction.. |
.::My Topic Spit::.
::.Boom Boom Boom, Zip Zip Zip, Crack Crack Crack, BooOOm.:: As You See..These Are The Sounds Of War That Conquer The Night.. As I Sit In My Tent and Write..I Sweet and Cry Tears Of Fright.. It's Just Me..Myself..and I..As I Look To The Stars For Guidance.. The Worlds Coming Down On Me With Giants Starving For Violence.. Exploitation Has Begun To Erupt Threw The Iraqian Population.. That There Is A U.S. Spy Among Them Looking For Confortations.. My Awarness For The Past Few Days Has Been Alert With High-Keen.. Seen Multiple Scenes On Screens Of Iraqians Cutting Into U.S. Spleens.. The Streets Are Adorn With Blood and Flesh Roiting Corpses.. The Streets Are Adorn With 1000 Pounds Of C4 Sitting On Porches.. There's No Electricity So I Ignite My Torch and Light My Way.. Cause For Today Is The Last Day From My Family I Will Ever Be Away.. As I Struggle To Withstand The Pressure Receeding From The Wind.. I Feel Strong Amounts Of Sand Hitting My Skin Causing Me To Fringe.. Crossing This Bridge, I See Adjacement Iraqian Soliders In The Distance.. A Thought For Instance..Why Am I Traveling Miles For U.S. Assistance?.. No Matter..I've Gathered The Information and Now I Need Transported.. To Get This Assorted Shit To The U.S. Intelligence and Explore It.. All These Thoughts and It Still Can't Cancel Out The Pain I Feel.. My Legs Are Worn Out and I Feet Are Numb, These Feelings Are Unreal.. I Have To Stop..Catch My Breath..Let My Legs Rest For A Couple Secs.. All Of A Sudden..Punches Hit My Chest..and I Am Locked Into A Chest.. I Am Screaming For Help but No One Heres Or Accknowledges My Screams.. Finally We Stopped and The Lid Opens To Reveal Gleems Of Light Beams.. I Get Out and They Command Me Get On My Knees and Reveal My Family.. I'm Not Really In The Best Position So I Follow...Can They Blame Me?.. I'm Sobbing and Sweeting Freely Due To The Fear Factor That I Am In.. I've Finished My List, and I Can See In The Lens Reflection Their Grins.. I Feel The Hot Tears Run Down My Pale Face and My Brain Seems To Seize.. My Lifeless Eyes Are Now Accompanied By The Blood Rushing To My Knees.. ~R~ |
damn hott topical verses from both of you
unholy wun: nice shyt really felt it imagery wasnt all that great but how everything was worded and vocabulary was nice...a fairly easy topic but you worked it to your best abilites...i think if you would have wrote longer this would have been a dope topical piece but as of now i would say its straight re$tricted has suprised me lately with amazing topical battle peices and this is a prime example...the wordplay in this verse was sickening...the imagery was amazing and the last bar where it says "I Feel The Hot Tears Run Down My Pale Face and My Brain Seems To Seize.. My Lifeless Eyes Are Now Accompanied By The Blood Rushing To My Knees.."<<best imagery i have seen in a topical battle just fire...everything was nice in this battle and restricted took this... vote: re$tricted...hott verses from both but re$tricted really took control of this topic and dropped a hott verse ~!1!~ |
Unholy Wun & Re$TricTed very nice battle. you both had the realness of the heat of battle. i like the verbs you both used to describe your surroundings. even pointin out smell, sight and fellings. whoa what a nice ass topical battle. this batlle is close. Re$TricTed i liked your verse and the way you explained hoe u got caught and how you met your demise. Unholy Wun i like the way retreived the enemy info and returned to base. but unfortunately i like Re$TricTed's better better of the way he explained his whole ordeal. thats how's it s really goin down in Iraq for real dawg. nice verses guys but Re$TricTed gets my vote but way of knockout.
vote=Re$TricTed |
This was a pretty good verse from both of you but I feel that Restricted had a better overall verse. Unholy had a good story but it was too short. You need to fo into more detail with your stories so people actually feel like they are there. Restricted went into pretty good detail and it was easy to visualize this but he made up a few words like Iraqians and Adjacement and a few others. This threw your verse off a little because I had to try and figure out what you were trying to say.
Vote - Restricted |
Enygma LoL...It Was Supposed To Be Adjacent.....Those Were Just Mispelled Words...LMAO...That Was My Bad, I Was Tired and In A Hurry..
But Thanks For All The Votes, Definitly Hot Battle.. Upping Dis ~R~ |
yo man sorry i dont got enuf posts but you seriously ripped this shit.....the imagery was fucking ill and your wordplay was good.....keep it up man\
uppin this for mi nizzle |
ok good verses from both but restricted easily he won he came with better imagery better vocab both had good flow and structure
unholy won u had a nice flow and vocab but ur imagery wasnt very good so work on imagery r u dont really need 2 work on anything u won good verse |
Nice drops by both, but Restricted definately outclassed you Unholy, you had a nice story, but your imagery and wordplay was not fuckin' wit Restricted's. Nice spits, just felt his more, definately got a better visual picture, and he still had good wordplay, and told a story, you tried to tell a story, and lost some wordplay.
Vote/Restriced ~CJ~ |
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