Death Of A Brother
 

your were just young at 11 years old,when you were hit by a car
jay walkin across the street when a car came speeding at 90 miles
your were rushed to the hospital in a coma and charges never filed
2 days later in the hospital struggaling to live we pulled the plug
you were just a little boy who wanted attention and to be loved
life ended short but you will always remain in our hearts
you were truly an angel who was never in to trouble and you were smart
good grades beautiful smile and a personality that anyone would love
you may nolonger be an angel on earth but you surely are from above
people never know what they have before they loose them
the lady said ''damn kid shouldn't be in the road'' straight accused him
whats this world coming to my thoughts just langer
everyday i yell and cry for my brother in anger
he was killed on july 5 ,1984 and yes i wasn't born yet
he was apart of my family and his life was tookin earlyfrom this planet
every since hes been gone our hole family panicked
but all had a feeling he was meant to go for a reason
although this happened to my family i hope it doesn't happen to another
for this is my story for having a death of a brother



this was my first open mic,so go easy on me.....^^^^^^and yes this is true

Whoa... thats some deep shit... some lines really made u think.. i liked ur flow.. it was a simple but effective concept.... Alot of emotions in this collab..>~1~<

7.8/10~

def some deep shyt but it didnt rhyme or flow to well but ima give u a 6/10 jus cause i liked the message it delivered......................

Thanx^^^uppin For Some Feedback

deep n emotional 2 thumbs up some stuff didnt rhyme but this is good enough for audio stay up cus

Nice Piece Of Work.. VALOR!!!!!!!!!!!!! ... 'Emotional' .. Im Feeling It 9.254/10

thanx upin for feedback

uppin for more feedback keep it comin yall

uppin

Mafia Soldier
 

Sorry man, your sorrow really showed ,Keep goin,one love to ya BROTHER!!!!!

thanx man.....uppin

yo...i thought it was too short..you did an exquisite jog expressing your emotions in what little space you had...but as good as it was..it would of been better if it was longer...and some of it flowed nicely..some of it didn't./...i'm sure you can pick out the good from the bad...but like i said...it's hard to be personal when you don't give it a whole lot of room..you did it well..but it would of been better if you would of kept doin it...but anyways..I'm done..R.I.P..MUCH RESPECT

2 fingas one love

thanx dawg.....i appreciate it man

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