Siinz \\\/// Jacket
 

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blind spit


no feeding!!!

hey checkin in

i will check in when i get my research done.........im still in the text tourny so yeah.....will check within the hour......

check it...
Metaphorically im twistin yo knees and got you crawlin on glass.
Because I shattered yo jaw and threw yo face in the grass.
You can throw up punches, but im like Kevin Garnett.
cuz when you shoot ya rhymes, there gonna hit the deck.
You prolly think yo hard, cuz you must commit a lot of Siinz.
But dawg it don’t count, jerken off to the Olson Twins.
This shit aint even a fuckin battle, you’re the whole laughin stock.
Your in yo room pullin cocks out yo mouth when you hear yo mom knock.
And Yo ass is to lame dawg you should of never even started.
And yo mom never gave birth to you bitch, she pussy farted!

uppin fo votes!!!

You've had four battles and each one you need a brain fix...
But instead you got your shit stird and then got it Mixx ...
All your battles get slept on and you are still wondering why...
After this battle you wont have to wonder anymore you gunna die...
Watch me make this dude going insane and put him in a straight "jacket"...
Cause in this rap game you are never going to be able to hacket-it...
Take this dude make him go blue in the face, like trying to run in space...
This dude thinks he is back in his bedroom slapping his dick off of his face...
All these newbs be thinking that the compare to all of us vets...
But all of your verse look like you just be spazzing out with tourettes...

blah not really into this shit right now so fuck it

oh yeah aslo check in

garnett and deck dont rhyme

Jacket:

Best line:

And Yo ass is to lame dawg you should of never even started.
And yo mom never gave birth to you bitch, she pussy farted!

^^So basic and played.

Siinz:


You've had four battles and each one you need a brain fix...
But instead you got your shit stird and then got it Mixx ...

^^Could be done betta. played, but personal.

Watch me make this dude going insane and put him in a straight "jacket"...
Cause in this rap game you are never going to be able to hacket-it...

^^heard it before...u twisted it differently aight.


V/: Siinz

Why: Because he had betta punches both was played as fuck.

dawg if you dont think Garnett and Deck rhyme as your readin, than you need a creativity check...all you can do you is make up rhymes and punches that a six year old girl could come up with..and plus you stole my idea with having a dick in your face in your bedroom..plus that "straight jacket", "hack it" rhyme has been used and used again in tons of battles. Uppin fo votes!!

umm i didnt steal shit from you that is why its a blind spit.......becuase you dont read the others verse until you spit yours........and net and eck dont rhyme so there for garnett and deck wouldnt rhyme....but whatever stop tryna sway votes....

uppin

if you want to think that Garnett and deck dont rhyme as your readin the shit, then go ahead and think that..that only proves to me yo mind cant think in a creative fashion, and you could neva come up with hot shit..and i believe yo ass talked shit first, so dont say shit about me tryin to sway votes.
please give us an honest vote: da fava will be returned

Both verses were aight..need lil elevation..but they were aight...

Vote = Black Siinz

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

both were ight but black siinz had betta punches

vote black siinz return that fava

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=127057

Metaphorically im twistin yo knees and got you crawlin on glass.
Because I shattered yo jaw and threw yo face in the grass.
weak opener...
You can throw up punches, but im like Kevin Garnett.
cuz when you shoot ya rhymes, there gonna hit the deck.
wtf?...weak...try peronsals..
You prolly think yo hard, cuz you must commit a lot of Siinz.
But dawg it don’t count, jerken off to the Olson Twins.
lol...datz iight...they hot tho:)
This shit aint even a fuckin battle, you’re the whole laughin stock.
Your in yo room pullin cocks out yo mouth when you hear yo mom knock.
sex jokes= played
And Yo ass is to lame dawg you should of never even started.
And yo mom never gave birth to you bitch, she pussy farted
wtf was that? worst bar
total-4/10



You've had four battles and each one you need a brain fix...
But instead you got your shit stird and then got it Mixx ...
lmfao...nice opener
All your battles get slept on and you are still wondering why...
After this battle you wont have to wonder anymore you gunna die...
eh..okay..
Watch me make this dude going insane and put him in a straight "jacket"...
Cause in this rap game you are never going to be able to hacket-it...
nice personal..
Take this dude make him go blue in the face, like trying to run in space...
This dude thinks he is back in his bedroom slapping his dick off of his face...
eh...weak..
All these newbs be thinking that the compare to all of us vets...
But all of your verse look like you just be spazzing out with tourettes...
lmfao..nice closer....structure was nice
total-8/10

vote- sinzz

hit up mah battles in fl

Metaphorically im twistin yo knees and got you crawlin on glass.
Because I shattered yo jaw and threw yo face in the grass.

^^ Filler and it makes no sense..NEVER OPEN a battle with FILLER...shud be ur best punch in the battle...


This shit aint even a fuckin battle, you’re the whole laughin stock.
Your in yo room pullin cocks out yo mouth when you hear yo mom knock.
And Yo ass is to lame dawg you should of never even started.
And yo mom never gave birth to you bitch, she pussy farted!

^^^ Disses/punches are corny and immature...develop some creative ways to diss him using personals/metas/wordplay

elevate dawg...ur flow was coo tho

15/30

You've had four battles and each one you need a brain fix...
But instead you got your shit stird and then got it Mixx ...

^^ Not a strong opener...but better than jacket's


This dude thinks he is back in his bedroom slapping his dick off of his face...
All these newbs be thinking that the compare to all of us vets...
But all of your verse look like you just be spazzing out with tourettes...


^^ Decent...but like Jacket's, lacking in complexity...I'd like to see you develop more intricate set ups for ur punches using more wordplay

decent verse tho

20/30


Vote: Blak

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