<<<>>> Commercialism Diss....helium <<<>>>
 

yo... need feedback... first drop on the site....



Hip Hops ~life-force~ bein ~destroyed~, struggle to find the ~pure-source~, commercialism bein ~deployed~, //
Only American idol shit bein ~employed~ this biz startin to pain my ass like a ~hem~A~roid~//
The fake ~rookie~rap~ fuckin this culture till its manure ~manafactured~crap~, killin real rap like a ~rat~ in a ~bear~trap~//
Tryin to sell this as music, like peeps were ~dumb~saps~, that aint hip hop, that's ~sugar~rap~//
Murdering talent like a ~serial~killer~, shits startin to scare the shit outta me like a Michael Jackson video ~thriller~//
Actin gangsta talkin "fa shizzle" an ~fa~rilla~ wen ya jus know they rich as hell, afford to give away $100's as ~stockin~fillas~//
The way the biz is headin... I dont wanna be in the ~spot~light~ it's like a broken cradle...shit dont ~rock~right~//
An if we gonna stand up... We in for a ~shit~fight~ its like we're Iraq an they the U.S... They got the power...but we got the ~might~//
It's like... star wars 2... Attack of the ~clones~ music needs to differ...Big was the king... Now they all think they got the ~throne~//
Its like they thought bout differing styles... but decided to ~postpone~ wen...yrs ago...they prided their ~own~ ~dope~tones~//
The didn't work hard to find a style... it was ~right~thurr*~ wit everyone else's they aint gangsta...gangsters dont wear that ~much~fur~//
Thinkin their shockin, like eminem, causin a ~stir~ but it's been played out too much, an im quite ~sure~//
You think Big n Pac woulda ~died~for~this~ or ~strived~for~this~ no.... they flowed from the core an ~started~this~//
If they were alive they woulda ~tried~to~miss~ the shit that's comin from these fake's ~wannabe~lips~//

Yo that shit was HELLA real, but gotdamn homie chose a better color for your font next time. Dat shit is blinding. Hot spit.

uppin

yea, nice shit.. nice shit.. keep it rollin

it was iight but i think it woulda been alotta betta if u woulda shortened them lines....everything else was hott but jus to much per line iigth kid good shyt.....................

^^^ thanx for the props homie... uppin

Mafia Soldier
 

I gotta say that was some crazy shit, better than I could do yet!!Keep Goin wit it!!

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^^^Fuckin hot bro. keep them flames comin

yo that was hot..i liked it a lot honestly...but there is flaws in everybodies work...and the flaw i saw on yours was..you used too many multis..that sounds strange...but it makes your lines too long..somebody touched on that already...but yea..it's because of the multis...using them is fine..but the more you use them...the more of less fitting words you have to try and use..and it takes away from your overall product...good drop tho...i enjoyed readin it..stay up homie

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