RapVerse.com Community

RapVerse.com Community (http://community.rapverse.com/index.php)
-   Elevated Front Lines Battles (http://community.rapverse.com/forumdisplay.php?f=193)
-   -   HeXeN Vs T-Storm....Topical... (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=127469)

HeXen 05-31-04 06:41 AM

HeXeN Vs T-Storm....Topical...
 
Topic: Suiside
Lines:As Many As It Takes To Beat Me...lol
No D/R
Check In

t-storm 05-31-04 07:26 AM

ok
 
aiight chkin in.................................verses due when homie???????????????????/

HeXen 05-31-04 10:05 AM

by wedensday....

HeXen 06-02-04 07:36 AM

Suicide
 
Preponderate of suicide is hot as it is cold but blocked like masonry,
Conesentrate motions at blade point consider left over basically,
Reiterate feelings run high the trail of thought quicker than blaze,
Matsatbate "wrong and Write" witnesses stand, stair eyes glazed,
Suicide contrasts fear and hate precipitate exit is blade sether,
Collide energy and mimic like textbook jump to save but survive NEVER,
Minimize fact with fiction to die is a life time off unhappiness
Revised in unwillingness, contained like liquid a pitray forfilness,
Scorn of consequences and resort to 9mm to resolve tourcher
And wish to be-reborn in a new world of satisfaction, leave by slaughter,
Imagination runs like gunfire in situation fired once and followed by others,
Notion end iternaty, feared followed through with strong minds. No lovers?
Suicide resorted by unspoken minds concealed anger to hatred,
Un reported failure to compete acts of bravery shown like sun debated,
Expelled student reckless bulling damages his ego un-respectively,
Suicide ruthless way to conclude the adventure as simple as poverty,
Convicted thurthless hoimes sent to high courts but we put Sue-a-side,
Death of loved family, freinds and enemy bring us closer when Tightens COLIDE.....

t-storm 06-02-04 02:06 PM

gonna give this a try!!!!!1
 
suicidal thoughts,mercilas and manic,no way out from this surpression
judgements of misconceieved ill conceptions to form depression
state of mind dessolate,dark with no way out at the end
a world of hatred,heart,body and mind on suspend
envy,greed,rage and desire..inspire to close-out this life
tall i stood surrounded by bright lights everywhere
so open to feelings..the cold air through my hair
shaking,trembling, my body in a state of convulse
sweat pouring,white as a ghost,i cud feel my heart pulse
thoughts through my mind..not of fear...but loss
why this,why happiness demands such pricely-costs
as i gazed down..the water swirls beneath me
just one more step untill my maker would be forced to meet me
world seems to stop..one last breath and hopefull prayer
open my arms,take the drop..aiming for a bata life in gods care

HeXen 06-02-04 05:56 PM

uppin 4 votes..

HeXen 06-03-04 06:00 AM

upp

infinite 06-03-04 07:02 AM

I was extreamly impressed by both of your battles, t storm I thing you made it sound more a poem and creative towards some bits, but that was really amazing I liked it alot. You got some talent both of you dont stop.

HeXen 06-03-04 11:30 AM

upp

t-storm 06-03-04 01:47 PM

Upin 4 Votes
 
uuuuuuuuuuuuppppppppppppiiiiiiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnn nnnn^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

.::N-Sight::. 06-04-04 09:31 AM

Preponderate of suicide is hot as it is cold but blocked like masonry,
Conesentrate motions at blade point consider left over basically,
Reiterate feelings run high the trail of thought quicker than blaze,
Matsatbate "wrong and Write" witnesses stand, stair eyes glazed,

^^^ Aiyo...this is so contrived it's not even funny..this is one of the easiest topics to write to. And, you sound like a robot. are you human? The vocab was there. BUt, where was the emotion?



suicidal thoughts,mercilas and manic,no way out from this surpression
judgements of misconceieved ill conceptions to form depression
state of mind dessolate,dark with no way out at the end
a world of hatred,heart,body and mind on suspend
envy,greed,rage and desire..inspire to close-out this life

^^^^ this is more like it...i mean, here you have emotion. Sure, it lacks the "big words"--2 cent words--of Hexen's piece. But, you piece actually connects with the reader on an emotional level more.


RHyme Tie
Vocab Hex
FLow Tie
Imagery Tstorm
Subject T Storm

Vote: T Storm

HeXen 06-04-04 12:36 PM

ok..w/e man....ur opinon..i respect it..uppin

t-storm 06-05-04 01:38 AM

upin
 
upin.............................................. .................................................. ......

t-storm 06-05-04 01:54 PM

upin
 
upin 4 honest votes............................................. ..................................

HeXen 06-06-04 07:56 AM

fuck..upp


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 02:00 AM.