HoPPa Intro (feedback plz)
 

Ladies n Gentleman, Watchout Its HoPPa,
Wrong use of words.. me n my boys'll Hop Ya/
Call me tha Heart Stoppa,
Cause im Aim'n at ya chest when i bring out my poppa/

FUck, my bad everybody, I wasnt done yet, it wasnt supposed to send yet. Damn.

Ladies n Gentleman, Watchout Its HoPPa,
Wrong use of words.. me n my boys'll Hop Ya/
Call me tha Heart Stoppa,
Cause im Aim'n at ya chest when i bring out my poppa/
P.Playerz, wanna talk about tha best?,
We bring out our weapons and you'll die like the rest/
So who tha fucks Next?,
We crazy mother fuckas, We'll plant a slug in ya chest/
Pull a gun up on me, i got my CLique to run to,
They come'n and they gonna run one up on you/
WUt u gonna do?,
Bring somemore people? and we'll murder your crew/
Ima Rep in this Bitch, PLATINUM PLAYERS!!!,
We comin wit the deepst, eliminate'n the haters/
If u one, we'll see your ass later,
and your family gonna see you, on the front of the daily paper!/

Cmon everybody give me some feedback, is it aright? it suck? im new here, i wanna know wut u all think of my style. Arite im out, peace.

im not quite sure if it suked mroe short or long bottom line is u need to up ya game....elevate big time kid...........