$Rich.P$ vs $MOKESKREEN
 

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Rumble and rage u destine to die as you countin ya days
U doubting the ways u pray, $moke got you lost in tha haze
Feelin’ the Blaze It’s Hot the $Rich’s is stuck in tha cage
I staged the end of ya chapter now I’m flippin’ tha page
Connectin’ punches wit ya Jaw and Bitch I’m hittin you hard
Watchin you fall turn to the crowd and watch em applaud
Deadly venom spittin at cha, with one bite you’ll be dead
Ya lyrics Suck, wouldn’t be bright wit a fuckin light on ya head
You’ll verbally curse ya verse and leave a horrible impression
Keep spittn wack verses and you gon’ end up wit a ugly infection
You couldn’t spit a good verse if you was reading a scripture
God forgive me but this stupid clown just don’t get the picture
I’m done wit this cat I’m out… I got nothin’ to prove
Here’s where the audience covers their mouth, points at u and you hear a big
OOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

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my mind is feeble and i'm built to destroy, i designed evil/
i can't be hit cause i "stick~and~move" like "blind~people"/
you flowin' recklace, kid you just "failed~the~test"/
plus ya spellin' is all jumbled like an "essay~without~a~spell~check"/
i aint a gangsta but don't under estimate me/
gotta big heart but please don't try to play me/
i'm dangerous, the last emcee to step i tossed him/
chopped his body and left the pieces in the "Creek~with~Dawson"/
i was told to flow from the heart so thats what i'm doin'/
this kid smokeskreen's career i'm bout to ruin/
plus i'm jackin' you for ya lunch and i'm takin' ya last buck/
and the "bathrooms~aint~free" so you "shit~out~of~luck"/
you think you illa than the illest, how you figure/
i "eat~emcees" all day and still manage to "keep~my~slim~figure"/
i'll end it with a teaser to sit and watch ya brains spill/
even if you used "i will" abbreviated you still couldn't be "ill"/

EASY

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Both smokeskreen and rich spit greatly.... smoke came with a few good verse, but overall I think Rich hit a bit harder. This was a real close battle and hard for me to decide. both rapperz had creative punches and gave it there best, but there must be a winner so....

winner.... $Rich.P$

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smoke
Rumble and rage u destine to die as you countin ya days
U doubting the ways u pray, $moke got you lost in tha haze nice multie, hence flow...
Feelin’ the Blaze It’s Hot the $Rich’s is stuck in tha cage
I staged the end of ya chapter now I’m flippin’ tha page damn.....
Connectin’ punches wit ya Jaw and Bitch I’m hittin you hard
Watchin you fall turn to the crowd and watch em applaud ok....
Deadly venom spittin at cha, with one bite you’ll be dead
Ya lyrics Suck, wouldn’t be bright wit a fuckin light on ya head nice.....
You’ll verbally curse ya verse and leave a horrible impression
Keep spittn wack verses and you gon’ end up wit a ugly infection ok.....
You couldn’t spit a good verse if you was reading a scripture
God forgive me but this stupid clown just don’t get the picture ok....
I’m done wit this cat I’m out… I got nothin’ to prove
Here’s where the audience covers their mouth, points at u and you hear a big
OOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH hahah nice...original


rich
my mind is feeble and i'm built to destroy, i designed evil/
i can't be hit cause i "stick~and~move" like "blind~people"/nice....
you flowin' recklace, kid you just "failed~the~test"/
plus ya spellin' is all jumbled like an "essay~without~a~spell~check"/no flow...but prety good
i aint a gangsta but don't under estimate me/
gotta big heart but please don't try to play me/weak...
i'm dangerous, the last emcee to step i tossed him/
chopped his body and left the pieces in the "Creek~with~Dawson".nice wordplay
i was told to flow from the heart so thats what i'm doin'/
this kid smokeskreen's career i'm bout to ruin/no....
plus i'm jackin' you for ya lunch and i'm takin' ya last buck/
and the "bathrooms~aint~free" so you "shit~out~of~luck"/nice.....
you think you illa than the illest, how you figure/
i "eat~emcees" all day and still manage to "keep~my~slim~figure"/ooooooooooo...damn
i'll end it with a teaser to sit and watch ya brains spill/
even if you used "i will" abbreviated you still couldn't be "ill"/that was original...none of that hiv or disease comparisons

k this was a hard choice...im reading again....
both are honest tied...but i gotta go with the first guy for consistency basically...flow was all arounded better although you had like one weak line....but his was more on point.....sry if this is the wrong choice...just going with my gut instinct...but i respect you both for nice verses.....so vote goes to smokescreen

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i think rich p won this one cuz his punches caught my eye. Both of yall did good both of yall nice but only one person can win

Rumble and rage u destine to die as you countin ya days
U doubting the ways u pray, $moke got you lost in tha haze
This Flowed alright, but weak for an opener- no real punchlines a little wordplay off haze and your name but nothing spectacular.
Feelin’ the Blaze It’s Hot the $Rich’s is stuck in tha cage
I staged the end of ya chapter now I’m flippin’ tha page
Again, the structure and flow is good, but not a real strong punchline
Connectin’ punches wit ya Jaw and Bitch I’m hittin you hard
Watchin you fall turn to the crowd and watch em applaud
This was a better punchline- still good flow
Deadly venom spittin at cha, with one bite you’ll be dead
Ya lyrics Suck, wouldn’t be bright wit a fuckin light on ya head
heres some wordplay, better punch again
You’ll verbally curse ya verse and leave a horrible impression
Keep spittn wack verses and you gon’ end up wit a ugly infection
good flow, but i think you coulda re-worded this 2nd line for maximum effectiveness
You couldn’t spit a good verse if you was reading a scripture
God forgive me but this stupid clown just don’t get the picture
first line was o.k but you shoulda finished with a hard punch- this didn't do it
I’m done wit this cat I’m out… I got nothin’ to prove
Here’s where the audience covers their mouth, points at u and you hear a big
OOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
lol, kinda funny closer, not bad. Decent verse overall.


my mind is feeble and i'm built to destroy, i designed evil/
i can't be hit cause i "stick~and~move" like "blind~people"/
lol nice opener, good wordplay strong punchline here.
you flowin' recklace, kid you just "failed~the~test"/
plus ya spellin' is all jumbled like an "essay~without~a~spell~check"/
the structure is off a little, but decent punch
i aint a gangsta but don't under estimate me/
gotta big heart but please don't try to play me/
I think it kinda fell off a little on these two lines, really basic here
i'm dangerous, the last emcee to step i tossed him/
chopped his body and left the pieces in the "Creek~with~Dawson"/
Dawsons Creek Punchlines is kinda played and you didn't aim this at your opponent- two things to watch for in the future.
i was told to flow from the heart so thats what i'm doin'/
this kid smokeskreen's career i'm bout to ruin/
decent flow- no real hard punches though
plus i'm jackin' you for ya lunch and i'm takin' ya last buck/
and the "bathrooms~aint~free" so you "shit~out~of~luck"/
lol- funny, you set this up pretty well- good punchline.
you think you illa than the illest, how you figure/
i "eat~emcees" all day and still manage to "keep~my~slim~figure"/
lol, that was tight- structure goes off a little again but it flows good- good punch
i'll end it with a teaser to sit and watch ya brains spill/
even if you used "i will" abbreviated you still couldn't be "ill"/
This was a tight closer.. very creative wordplay with i will and ill... I think Your verse had a couple points where maybe you didn't try so hard but all in all the whole thing was above average, good punches, I liked your wordplay- the rhymes weren't simple but very easy to understand... Good battle you two but i give the vote too... Rich P

isht, almost forgot, please drop an honest vote here..... http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=128356

You had a very unique way of saying what you mean!

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