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$pAwn oF $AtAn .VS. Immortal_Souljah04
r.u.l.e.z A.r.e.:
1 Day To Spit Drop Within Time Limit Drop Anytime None Spits First No Hate/crew Votes No D/r No Recycling 10 Bars (20 Lines Only) Don't Forget To Check In |
well drop whenever I'll be done in a hour or so anywayz....>>>CHECK CHECK.
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aight here's my drop
people say these words are so out of this world// the words came for souls so they don't get hurled//1 without a shadow of a doubt these fact's are all true// and if it isn't, you dead what tha fuck you gonna do//2 if you alive guess what homie , I'm already inside// if you rip me open nothing is what you gonna find//3 because my soul, my lungs, & my heart's already gone// basically in a way I'm a little like a mowed-down lawn//4 basically because I barely have anything at all left// choose the right way because the left way is death//5 this world is the most screwed-up thing I've ever seen// people think of stupid thangs like gossip in magazines//6 ya'll don't know we all surrounded by the smell of death// fake thugs sayin' shit like no one will take they last breath//7 see what you get when your loved ones are in the obituary// and the following week you grieve at their cemetery//8 you be seeing things like a shadow taking your loved ones// just like it took Tupac Shakur the real true "God's Son//9 lost people we loved like Biggie, Big Pun & N.W.A's Eazy E// that's when we lost true catz from shootings, AIDS & HIV//10 well this is basically about what's happening to me & some other catz I know & some shit like killing diseases....ya noe the drill (don't forget to vote when he drops |
yo I will check ur bat out when he drops but can someone check this battle up plz thnx and peace.
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=128196 |
yo you punking out or wat if you ain't hurry up and drop aight
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Yo , check
You stay frontin cos i take long to reply,// Well im trying to take it easy on this MC lie// You see between me & you there aint no competition// Like im watchin retake of some fuckin Eurovision// Guess wat nigga.. yeah im outta here// out of vision, out of sight, out of stratosphere// Homie i got better things to do// I aint gonna hang round listening to old house blues// it hard to have a mother who does nutin but fussin// But c`mon ya didnt have to go on and have kids with your cousin// Listen up bitch thats off thats it// Listening to your rap is like a fuckin politic// You know wat ,take ya time on this rap battle// go do your choirs and take out ya mamas cattle. Yo hom listen up i got shit to lay// After some votin youy be cryin in dismay// go back to your hood with the bear foot aborigonies// You go back to your bitch and she says she lost her ovaries// Too bad you cant have all that sex// Turn over to rock and impreganate Stevey-Nex// |
aight than dawg uppin 4 votes up in dis bitch don't sleep on dis!!!!!!!!!
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aight nice battle but
struc- tie personals- IS punches - IS pulled it out r.s. - IS meta's - tie but once again IS pulled it. This was a topical battle though and ya boy IS did it. Nice work. |
Return the favor please, if you do then thank you.
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aight uppin4 votes don't sleep on dis aight!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Uppin Come On Don't Sleep On This Battle Now Aight!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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Okay, to me it's pretty basic. If it's a topical and you don't stay on topic....you lose. So, yeah I have to give it to Immortal regardless. But, he deserved it anyhow cuz his worplay was better. 1 luv y'all.
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Im gonna have to say IS won this battle.I was feeling his flow and rhyme and wordplay.his structure was really good on this battle.Ya need to work on personals.Ya punchlines hit pretty good...for SS i think ur flow was O.K and wordplay ya need work on it......ya need to elevate some..ya struc was pretty good.ya nedd to work on the punches and personals....iight both of ya elevate
vote=IS http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=128770 |
okay....IS gets it.....this was clearly a topical battle and spawn did not honor that..whether he didn't know or not is irrelevant...anyways...IS...some advice...you had soem good ideas...and good topics..good thoughts..but it was wayyyy too jumpy...like you went from one thing to the next....it's like you couldn't stay on one topic...maybe thats what you were goin for because it;'s whats goin on in the world...but next time..I reccomend cutting out half of the ideas you used...and adding atleast two times what you originally had to each idea so that there all complete..anyways...not a bad drop...keep bangin...2 fingas one love
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wtf...this is a topical...dude was spittin at immortal...so u kno...
vote:immortal |
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