DNyce vs kkkhater
 

ok the rules are
this is a TOPICAL on ur time in c block
5-12 lines max and do not go over it
and no crew,hate, or dq votes
and u have 20 minutes after u check in to drop
and u spit first good luck
and check this out 2 peace
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=128196

hey I will drop it tommrrow iigth iam waiting for u to drop peace.

yo this crammed up cell fux with my MIND//
as it takes up on my life to much TIME//
I was put in this shit for murdering this THUG//
who did not even no how to MUG//

so before I lay my self down to SLEEP//
I pray when a convict hits me that I will see SHEEPS//
when yea think hell is the YARD//
u r wrong for when u are in the shower a fairy looks at u with a HARD//
So they say every man goes through this shit for YEARS//
but all it brings me is my TEARS//
So all this cell now is to me is my cell of pain//

Sittin here on lockdown tryin 2 turn my life around and get away from these savage clowns//

Can't even sleep at night cuz there'z alwayz niggaz tryin 2 hold me down//

I'm fuckin locked up won't be out no time soon i should have neva murked dat nigga on a sunday afternoon//

Niggaz in here tryin 2 take my manhood in da shower//

so i sharpen up a spoon den tear out his inner bladder//

I gotta get outta here soon or else i'm destined for doom locked up in dis concrete room//

uppin for votes...................................

ok peeps we are uppppin for votes/////////////////////

UGH...I would like to see a topical in frontlines that's actually well written. Both verses were horribly structured. Plus, the lyrics were pretty weak. The winner of this battle shouldn't brag about it.

Breakdown

Flow: KKK
Vocab: none
Rhyming: tie
Imagery: KKK
Story: tie


Vote: KKK...barely...he only won because his flow was simple...choppy...but still easier to read than D nyces

BOTH need to elevate...Go read a topical by Restricted..ME...or even Killa Bwoy


holla


Vote:

yo we are still upppin for votes peeps/////////////////

Flow: KKK
Vocab: none
Rhyming: draw
Punches: KKK
Structure: KKK

KkK had this one...he had betta structure, punches were harder, and the flow was good...

vote = KkKHaTeR

another not so great battle, but kkk ur elevating good job..dnycne learn how to fuckin strucutre a text battle, both of u guyz had aight lines i guess...dnyce if wrote a different way i might of voted for you.
v=kkk

kkk got thiz hiz flow waz betta pretty weak battle but he made more sence d nyce ya structure needs to be worked on ya flow waz decent tho

weak battle boith verses were really bad...dynce some of your shyt didnt even rhyme and your structure was terrible...you had nothing good or interesting at all in your verse and it was just boring and a bad attempt to rap...kkkhater at least your verse rhymed your structure was decent your punches were weak..and your flow was not consistenet...you both need to elevate alot

vote:kkkhater

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