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Rascal 'vs' cursive *Topical..
10-20lines..
Drop in 1hour from the battle set up.. 3-0 K.O 4-1 T.K.O G'luck.. |
in this and i started thinking already..
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checking in....
this should be an interesting match... good luck... |
Topic - Why did I do it?
Stained hands aching, adrenaline prevalent im continually shaking thoughts haunting my mind, ive fought the fight but my soul's breaking from constant obnoxious torment, unseen demons leaving imprints treading on my heart wearing thin the strings, wispering schemed hints unheard by my ears it appears that my conscience has dissapeared clearly remembering the night ive tried so severly to forget the fears cocaine flowing through my veins unable to explain or contain my anguish ive sustained with restrained entertainment narcotics remain my only language trying desperately in vain to attain some state of perfected serenity only to find hopes fragillity plummeting downward tainting my indentity knocking on the doors of life, openely inviting in societies fallacy someday ill arise from the ashes of my misconcepted mistakes gradually then sit alone replaying the morbid memories asking myself 'why did i do it' there was nothing i could have gained or anything i needed to prove through it |
Why did I do it ..I'm sitting on my bed, dreaming only of you.. ..I'm wishing one day, my dreams of you will come true.. ..I look at your picture,can't help to shed a tear and cry.. ..While asking myself a ?, why Rascal you foo' why.. ..But now I have to pay, for all that I have done.. ..And live my life, knowing you are the one the only one.. ..I made the mistake, what I did was awful i feel so bad.. ..But we became good friends, and it warmed my heart made me glad.. ..I wish I could put in words and tell you, the way I felt.. ..Then you called over the summer, my heart began to melt.. ..My feelings never changed, to this day i will always love you.. ..And I wish we could be together, but not every dream comes true.. ..Now were in high school, and its like we play this game.. ..Your on and off liking me, do you know my pain.. ..I know everyone loves you, and i know you love to flirt.. ..But just becareful wearin that mini-skirt, of whos feelings your begining to hurt.. ..If you think im mad at you, I'm not I'm just oh so confused.. ..And wondering if my actions, were the right one's to choose.. ..Now that I pored out my heart, I know one thing is true.. ..Nobody could be more in love, than my love is for you, shame to no the feeling is no mutural.. |
well done rascal....
the voting may start...... |
bump this up.. rite back a you..
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BOth were nice
Cursive: had sum flow ya structure wasnt good i wasnt feelin it.. ya vocab was ok betta dan rascal cursive the whole verse I fonunded it differently Rascal: Your strutcure was mad good your flow excellent, vocab could''ve been betta straight up you took this one becuz u had a betta structure and flow I also enjoyed urs too vote: rascal |
IMA VOTE ON THE POLL WIT MY ALLIAS iight im aka out law
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^forgot to poll vote.....
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upping this for more votes.. its a decent battle so vote.. leave a llink ill view your b
attle :) pz. |
nice battle by both
Curosive you had some creative shit in ya verse and emotion was good and i liked ya structure...overall nice verse but lacked creativity for me rascal you had mad flow in ya verse...no need to make ur verse in orange either dat shit hurt ma eyes.....structure was ok creativity and vocab was dope in my opinion so u get ma vote pz |
gud topical ima give this to rascal because he had better imagery and his flow was better i also liked his rhyme scheme.......i liked both structures equally but im stil givin this to rascal for those 2 better subjects
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this is yours kid. KO. blah.
.. i dont see how his rhyme scheme was better, i had much more multis. my vocab was incredibly more complex as well... but whatever. take your win... |
Good Battle But Rascal Took it with this Topic i liked how he done it and he had some time to think i liked it his Verse On WHy DId I Do it was Very Complex and i think he Took this 1
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