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Never Forget Ya (Feedback plz)
Here it is lil long but blah!
Never Forget Ya... VERSE 1 one day me and your eyes instantly locked... maybe because we both had love for hip-hop... or maybe this shit was just a good accident... many answers but I think your a angel dat god sent... well from that very moment our relationship grew... grew to the point I was either with her or my crew... one night you called me up but it wasn't a good thing... told me you got a job offer that'll get you bling-bling... told me it's over too many guys out there to cheat... and it'll never end until my jobs finally complete... but tell me where you gonna go when this all falls down... well not with me there's gonna be someone wearing yo crown... OH MY GOD! I understand now your jobs being a prostitute... who would pay for sex when cats be raping, go to a institute... (Chorus 2x) hmm...you may of did me wrong but i'll never forget ya... hmm...if I had a chance again I would come get cha... but it'll never happen oh how I really miss ya... how I screwed up bigtime I can't go back to get cha... VERSE 2 hmm...I should of came back for you my homeboy... but I let chu get shot, played you like a damn toy... we have been friends for so long & there's no trust.... when we need help the other will be left like dust... but I wonder every single day what if I helped you... homey, will I end up in a casket just like you?... there's no telling what would of happened if I came... will you still die young will it still be the same?... left my homeboy hanging and now he's buried no breath... never sleep like Nas said "Sleep is the cousin of death"... (Chorus) VERSE 3 hmm... I shoulda came sooner to save real hip-hop... but I was too late it already became fake hip-pop... whatever happened to rappers like Tupac & B.I.G... well it's a disgrace to our well-known countries... I guess it's up to the truth of the truth: me... hip-pop spreads like a disease like umm Leprosy... Ja,Chingy,50 are all the definition of bubblegum... chewed up hip-hop, and they ain't ready for red rum... you took away my music now bitches BRING IT BACK!... can't get it back but I'll never ever forget ya... I swear till the day I die I'll never forget ya... (Chorus 2x) Never Forget Ya....And I never will.... |
any feedback just need some suggestions for this shit ya know
what should I do to make this better my weak points & strong points.... |
touching
nice piece of work. i'd like to hear that down on track...
nice slow beat.. one of those real love songs... man i hope that shit's not true tho... :thumbup: |
thanks for the feedback much love!
VERSE 1: talking bout a lady half true the ending was fiction intro until phonecall was all true.......... VERSE 2: talking bout leaving your homeboy ya know the one you supposed to trust no matter what, but they can''t trust you cuz you left em hangin' to die.... VERSE 3: was about hip-hop and how it changed from hip-hop to hip-pop basically since Pac & Biggie died nothing really to say it just went bubblegum shit but some rappers hold it down like Jean Grae, Immortal Technique & Nas........... rate my shit out of 10................ ??/10 |
Nice Yo
That was awesome I too am hoping that ytou record that and make your verses a little lopnger. I give that a 7/10 or maybe a 8/10 it was real nice. Keep it up man.
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aights thanks for the feedback ya'll much appreciation here
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anymore feedback for this young and elevating cat???????
??/10 ~I'm Out~ |
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