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.::Re$tricted Vs. Rated::.(Topical)
.::Topic: Eyes Of A Snyper::. ::.Rules.:: 20 Lines Max 5 Votez Winz No Crew No Hate No D/R Spits Due In 30 Min .::Checkity Check::. ~R~ |
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I Feel The Sweat Run Into My Eyes and I Feel The Burn.. I Steal The Night's Silence, Shoot, Yield and Turn.. From The Moment I Brought Forth This Malcom Rifle.. I've Had Desire and Passion, Approaching The Eifle.. Tower Of Course, To Peirce Bullets Threw The Concrete.. To Kill Underground Workers, Leave Their Body Obsolete.. That Passion Has Brought Me To Where I Am Founded Now.. Accompishled Seals Training, You Stop Me? Ask How.. I Have Stealth Acrobatics That Cascade In The Dark.. Known To Drop 30 Rounds With Just A Click and A Spark.. Back To Reality Now, Can't Doze Off, Could Mean Death.. Cause The One Second I Stop, Could Be My Last Breath.. I Infintrate The Roof Top, and My Target Is In Vision.. I'm Known As Rated X With DeadlyVision Locked In Prisms.. Call Me VALOR For I Am The KillahBwoy Of This Wars Time.. Since My Prime Been To Known To Drop Bodies Like Land Mines.. I Unlock The Saftey and Draw The Scope To My 20/20 Eye.. Line Up The Aimer, Take A Deep Breath, Line Up My Sight.. Pull The Trigger, My Shoulder Rocks Back From The G-Force.. The Presidents Head Subsides, Finally Completed My Main Course.. ~R~ |
Figures He Would Get Offline..LMAO...
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sorry ta clog but nice spit..1
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As the light gleems in my eye I only see one thing and thats veryation Sniper I dont know the name of the brand but I planned an assination President George Bush, united forced leader to be right and exact Sitting in my back window on 34th street for a fact deepless scope of the rifle let my heart scared and breathless Setting up my plan on how the president was on my disnated list Scoped the Little white guy out for like 1 hour I think Ready for the death of this little bastard, I got the clips in the sink I concetrated mainly on his heart and I thought to my how would it feel Taking away someones pride on a man who's hunting a kill Outside my back window I see the The President as he steps out his S.U.V had the finger locked and ready right for the death of a brave legacy ONe more thing before I put him to rest of I didnt have no crusafex Why, why Terrell Your just a bumb Black boy whos trying to search for sex Getting my self over it I aimed at his Leadership and fellowship heart Oops I messed up my aim becuz I had a full stomach and I had to fart Finally locked on him right in his yard as the fate of a shadow gleams Hes just a white 43 year old man who tried to cover his fullfilist dreams I aim the Sniper at him has he gives his speach like if he was a gem Aiming right at his heart I fired and thought to myself,Did I get him? |
To get your facts straight I have my invisible mode on no hate,But I had to set up the tournament
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LoL Kid Please...You Act Like Your Sumone Special..NeWays..Took An Hour To Make That Wack Topical Spit Uppin Dis Battle ~R~ |
rated your verse was wack!!!
your flow wasnt flowing that good ....your strutcutre was alright but not great best part:As the light gleems in my eye I only see one thing and thats veryation Sniper I dont know the name of the brand but I planned an assination President George Bush, united forced leader to be right and exact Sitting in my back window on 34th street for a fact ^^ you strated of great... worstepartONe more thing before I put him to rest of I didnt have no crusafex Why, why Terrell Your just a bumb Black boy whos trying to search for sex Getting my self over it I aimed at his Leadership and fellowship heart Oops I messed up my aim becuz I had a full stomach and I had to fart ^^ that last part was immature and you lost the battle cuz you made his a joke restircted you put good imagrey and emotion into this battle you won becuz of better flow imagrey and emotion bottom line i aint gota say no more..... --shadow |
its aight I know he probably got me but I aint going to say he beat me...But Shadow still made becuz what I said in his battle but its aight..Uppin for more votes....Good battle ~R~
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Matter fact ~R~ Yea I lost I had to rush to set up the open mic tourny but yea I lost good battle....Add another win to ya record
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O OK...LOL
You Want Me Just To Post This Up In Close Battles Forum and Just Tell Strobe You Said I Won and You Wanted This Closed? ~R~ |
Umm
R: U worded your flow betta, Imagery was deffinitly felt, emotions were ok. U stayed on point nice one. Rated: U also had pretty good flow, Imagery u lacked, Emotions was in and out, kinda off sometimes but aight. V/: Restricted |
Restricted....
topic fit you well. You capitalized on getting your point across in a nice rhyming fashion.Flo was on key at all time's. A few times you came out of context. but it wasn't a huge deal. Overall a nice drop. The best part about ur topical were ur descriptive metiphores...Nice. Rated.... I'll be honest. I really wasn't feeling this at all. Number one ya flow was off. Which murder's a topical. Also your lil story really didn't grasp my attention...it was like blah blah blah...jus shoot the bastard. No real emotion into it. No hate. Work on that. Vote= Restricted |
yo, I think that REstricted took this shit easily.
Rated, your's was ok, man. But your flow wasn't all that great in it. It went off on specific places. It was overall and ok verse, but against Restricted you need to try much harder. Restricted, you had a pretty good verse. I liked your imagery in your verse was very good. Good job. Your flow was tight as well. Overall good job. You got this battle. v/R |
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