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keystyle
my rhymes come off tha top of my head/
leave u rollin in pain ontop of your bed/ 5 shot's rip through your chest now u full of led/ cause i'm a solgier and a solgier never dies/ tha pain can be unbareabal but he never cries/ a solgeir never dies he is forever alive/ all these people care about is cash money hoes/ not knowin tha intelligence he provides when he flows/ i'm speakin to everyone in different sections and rows/ take tha time to listen to wat goes on in my mind/ i flow to a different rhymes all whole other kind/ u can look and dig but my flow u will never find/ 15 in this world left by my self to fuckin roam/ run from my troubles now i'm by my self all alone/ hobo ask me for a dollar i didnt have a dollar to loan/ this is a fuckin keystyle it aint even written/ but like bullets hit chest's u gonna feel tha shit i'm spiten/ but once again it's just me by my self sittin/ age 13 need some money so i steped on tha drug scene/ i now yall say thats completly horrible it's obscene/ now i get money look at my wrists they gleam/ people wanna see me dead that's wat it seem/ lord tell me what was my purpose on earth/ cause my life been fucked since my birth/ in tha streets my fuckin death lerks/ put food on tha table that's supplied by drugs/ put bodies on tha ground thats supplied by slugs/ 25 to life cause his blood was spread all on my rug/ fuck it my life is over i'm goin to fuckin hell/ wit that 44 it's over refferee ring tha bell/ i'll be dead anywayz if these drugs i dont sell/ belive me ive tried to go fuckin strait/ but these drugs bring money and thats great/ before this i didnt have a pee on my plate/ not alot of multis :thefinger |
uppin for some feedback
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yea that was koo i like most of ya punches but i think it needed more vocab ~1~
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That was pretty nice shit dawg.....werk on some shit like line length, structure, flow, and ryhme scheme you will have this shit...nice werk.
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thankz man uppin
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it was all alrite, just u gotta work on that vocab, forreal, its a lil weak but other than that it was good. peace.
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