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Pro.Fess.In.All 06-17-04 11:53 AM

Incomplete
 
Darkness prevails, My vision is Impaired
Im not seeing the world for what it is...
Im seeing it through the reflection of the eyes of my girl
Its uncommon, the beauty of the eye softens
Needle pumps reality through my veins too often
Wake up yet again discreet, A Human Obsolete
A Bum on the Streets...My Life's Incomplete...

But wait a Minute, Poetry runs through my blood
As if Diddy ran the City, with a Great Poetic Love
Inspiration from the Harlem Rennaissance, It's never too late
In case, even if there's a minute left...
...Its a minute Left to take..
Fuck street rules, Gettin brains ain't a Priority
Im born with what I have Kickin Knowledge...
Till Knowledge Kicked Me...
Waken me up again, The dirty bed, sleep
With Rats on the street...
My brain is focused, but my Life's Incomplete

devil_advocate 06-17-04 01:36 PM

real gloomy but it was ight a lil try 2 sticc 2 1 point den move 2 anotha topic afta u complete dat 1

.::N-Sight::. 06-17-04 01:42 PM

i don't like this structure...the rhyming is erratic...but, the imagery is painted well


it doesn't flow well in my opinion because of the lack of a rhyme scheme


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