ok please help mere here lol. im new : )
 

ok here ie my brief history,

i am called Russell and i am 15. i used to be a mosher/goth which sucks i know...
but i got into rap big time and now listen to rap 24/7 and wear nothing but rap clothing.

first time spitting EVER. i know it will be shit but there is no other way to learn


dont fuck with my homie cos im a white gangster
i make u look worse than dic less ganster prankster
i sin to much to care about killin u
i pop nines for fun
for work i shoot a 2-2
i put u in a boddy bag in my boot
i wear tims
drive on chrome rims
u got no ride
and u aint a fuckin pimp
so fuck u if u doubt this rhyme
cos ima get better
and start to earn a few dimes
right about now is the time for me to stop
so dont fuck with me or ill pop my glock!

ok first ever rhyme written. i know its shit and im not arsed about that i just wanna learn how to spit with lyrical skill. any advice?

advice:

work on your punches it doesn't hit hard.....
put more words in each line......................
work on wordplay a lot........
up your vocab not enough big words
multis, rhyme scene and you can have potential in the future.......

~I'm Out~

peep my open mic its called "Valley Of Death"

^^^^ wut he sed, check my open mic "R.o.d. (Kool Col-b Style)" it mite give u sum ideas