Yo my first rap on this site
 

Yo dawgs this is my first rap on this site and im only 12


listen up all you dawgs im new here/
and this is were im gonna make my career/
yea this is were i start to rap/
ill snap at you like a steel trap/
i aint bothered what you say/
ill make it big one day/
no i aint into gangsta shit/
cause i just cant commit/
to being a smuggler, scramber pickpocket even a drug handler/


not very long just a verse but what od ya think

elevate

elevate. im 12 also. look

this bitch is done im takin him to the gallows to get hung//
your rhymes are hopeless like a gangbang witout the tung//
if u thought u were winnin this battle u must be mistaken//
shoot, u bite likes from ruben studdard and clay aiken//
my rhymes and flow are famous, history in the makin//
every bar i write ur mom is most definelty breath taken//
im "con~testin" you, just like ur mom "mou~lestin" you//
my calender merkinings.. April, May, Gods Son, your due//
i flip you over like a pankcake bein cooked really easy//
ima be 1-0 after this battle ni**a u betta believe me//
Gods Son? after this battle jesus gunna be whoopin ur ass//
he's sendin u into hell after this, he so sorry he givin u a free bypass//
u better hope u got Francis Of Asscise or Moses on ur back//
cuz this battle is won by me bitch, hit the road jack// haha

remember im 12 also

make sure u have good structure too...

like

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i know i need elevateing thats why im asking for someone to be my metor but no one seems to take any notice

aaaaaaaaw ... lolz

wat why u saying aawww whats wrong!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

nah nutin iz wrong am jus sayin init.. i mean itz ur 1st attempt so... keep tryin n u'll get ere... i wuz at ur stage once.. buh am getin betta...

aight its ok

Yo Dat Was Koo
 

Im 14 And Dat Was Pretty Good, But Im New 2 So If U Wanna Battle Wit Someone New Im Rite Here.

hey ill battle u if u is new yea and souljah u is pretty ill