Mjust23//vs.//TheOne
 

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10 LINES
NO CREW
VERSES DUE IN 35 MIN.
U SPIT FIRST


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aight chekin in

yo ur name givez thiz battle away, newb mistake...mjust?
then wtf zi thiz? insteada just that he threw in 23
first..i'm gonna spit thiz kat til' he kan't take it...i'm a dawg u kan't trust
i'm a rappin major bitch..so therz no fukin way u kan beat me

pfft... ya right i'm dum as fuk wen it comez to skewl
but not in the ring, i'll make a fool outta u
i'll burn u so bad u'll feel like a girl, like Paula Abdule
dum broad that hangz an fukz cowel..hez a true

Pain in the ass, unlike u, kuz u ain't got any skill
but elevate man...get betta if ya kan, til then...chill

YO, IT MIGHT TAKE A COUPLE OF BRAIN STORMS FOR U REALIZE U DEALIN WIT A MAN//
FUC WIT US AND DA RUBBER GRIP IS GONNA BE FITTED 2 MA HAND//
U REMIND ME OF A PILLOW, SOFT AND FLUFFY//
U BE DEAD SAYIN DAT NIGGA MJUST SNUFFED ME//
COME CLOSE 2 MA SET, ITS LIKE U IN A MINEFIELD//
U DEEP THROAT MORE GUYS DEN DAT BITCH FROM SEINFIELD//
A KILLA COBINATION IS MA LYRICS AND MA RHYMES//
YALL GET GOOSE BUMPS JUS FROM READIN MA NEXT 2 LINES//
PUSSY PLUS FAGGOT EQUALS U//
TRY AN FUC WIT ME, I'LL TURN UR TONGUE BLUE//
ME KILLA, ME SLAYA DOWN, AND RESSURECT U//
BEN AFLECK IN GIGLI SEEMS TO ERECT U//
THIS GUY CANT RYHME, CAN HE?//
NAW, HES TO BUSY SUCKIN TRANNYS. :shoot: :shoot: :shoot:

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hands down niggas mjust23 won by all the categorys...

Nice votein dumbass^.....unexplained vote.....Anyways.....
Mjust23....your verse was good...your punches were also good too...they seemed to hit hard....And your structure was good too...your lines werent big or anything...But for now dont use caps ...ya know...anyways overall you win this battle for better verse and better punches...
Theone....your verse was decent but not all dat good...your punches didnt seem to hit hard...But you've elevated alot but just keep elevatein aight....but you did decent in dis battle but elevate..

v/Mjust23

this was OK...nuttin good tho....no offense....

M your structure needs to change....
1. Kill CAPS
2. Kill //'s
3. No herbish smiley's at the end......

otherwise u had sum funny metiphores. I liked the seinfield line.

TheOne.....
your structure was better...but don't space it....
your whole verse was kinda weak....u focused on ryhming to much....
and wit the same words to many times.

also you talk about urself alot....Skewl....try to focus on him more......

and spell some what correct....CAN'T.....

Vote- M

when soundclick gets back up....hit my audio battle up wit an honest vote...thanks....

My vote..
 

My vote goes to MJUST23 cuz the other cat didnt seem to rhyme and I got lost in it and MJUST23 I was feelin' he came more harder. Nice Job.

vote: Mjust23

YO, IT MIGHT TAKE A COUPLE OF BRAIN STORMS FOR U REALIZE U DEALIN WIT A MAN//
FUC WIT US AND DA RUBBER GRIP IS GONNA BE FITTED 2 MA HAND//
ok...but no punch
U REMIND ME OF A PILLOW, SOFT AND FLUFFY//
U BE DEAD SAYIN DAT NIGGA MJUST SNUFFED ME//
aight....
COME CLOSE 2 MA SET, ITS LIKE U IN A MINEFIELD//
U DEEP THROAT MORE GUYS DEN DAT BITCH FROM SEINFIELD//
ha ha...ok
A KILLA COBINATION IS MA LYRICS AND MA RHYMES//
YALL GET GOOSE BUMPS JUS FROM READIN MA NEXT 2 LINES//
ok...but ya'll? no your dissin your opp
PUSSY PLUS FAGGOT EQUALS U//
TRY AN FUC WIT ME, I'LL TURN UR TONGUE BLUE//
ME KILLA, ME SLAYA DOWN, AND RESSURECT U//
BEN AFLECK IN GIGLI SEEMS TO ERECT U//
ok...
THIS GUY CANT RYHME, CAN HE?//
NAW, HES TO BUSY SUCKIN TRANNYS
aight....

not a great drop...didnt have great punches but you did do better than the one

6.0/10

i dont feel like breakin down the ones verse....but one your struc was
off and i think you could of done better.....work on using personals

vote-Mjust