Real Niggaz
 

Yo, this is my first real open mic in a few months... Wrote this shit right after my "Best Friend" Turned on me and then came back and apologized, Fuckin bullshit if you ask me...

I roll with a chosen few...
Who have rosen through...
Everything the ocean brews...
In a storm when the waves crash and collide...
Rollen with me, in my cars passengers side...
Our latest man fell short he didnt pass the test...
So he wont be with us in life or after death...
You can't change be yourself or leave the crew...
Gotta be down with us for years, yes even you...
You gotta prove youreself day in and day out...
We let you in but youre changin, so stay out...
Real friends back you up, no questions asked...
Cause in a fight, theres no point stressin that...
We light em up, and then we just let um burn...
Friends are friends over time, now my lessons learned...

Chorus...X2

He said he was my dawg, said he'd be it for life...
But now all i want him to do is meet with my knife...

I say that because good friends are everlasting...
They know what each other mean without ever asking...
I aint gon lie, we prolly aint gon pull out a tech...
And re-route youre neck...
But we wont hesitate to break a forty over youre head...
Cause we'd proudly knock you out, and go, sober to bed...
My friends would take a bullet wound in the gut...
At the same time a harpoon in the nut...
Put each others lives, far above their own...
Even though we love our families and love our homes...
You aint friends cause you smoke, weed at night...
You're friends cause you tell each other shit, when you need advice...
Or people that help you get what you seek in life...

Chorus...X2

He said he was my dawg, said he'd be it for life...
But now all i want him to do, is meet with my knife...

Youre friends arent just people who help you pass the time...
You can tell them anything that you have in mind...
But you need time, friends arent made in day...
Cause after a few years, no one can say that its fake...
If ur hangin from a tree a friend would cut you loose...
Even if they lost their life, its just what you do...
But be thankfull we just lost our last man...
If i see him again, i hope hes in a trash can...
Comes back a week later and tries to apoplogize...
When i flipped him off you should have saw his eyes...
Now i just got three motherfuckers who would die for me...
Wouldnt give my name for a million dollar bribery...

Chorus...X2

He said he was my dawg, said he'd be it for life...
But now all i want him to do is meet with my knife...

werd thats some deep but sorta up tempo shit....very nice....flow was tight....wordplay and creativity were nice....u started off slow the first 4 lines but then it was fire from then on....deep shit and could tell u meant it and it came from ya heart...thats important....nice shit man...props...

fealin it

because shit be happin wit me all the time just like that but ummmm
maybe add a few lines to the chorus... be pretty sick shit but the verses where pretty tight spoke the truth on some seriuos shit


nice shit brah

Chorus's are usually 4 lines... But are fuckin hard to write... So mine is two... But... Its four when you repeat it... Just couldnt think of anything else... Because that is all i want him to do...

that shit was good man i enjoyed it fa real keep it up

yo anxiety that was really deep good wordplay too i was feelin the whole thing...good structure and rhyme scheme you put this together well...keep droppin more of these cuz this was hott overall : 9/10 good shyt

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gud shit....like all the rest sed very deep keep at it homy....9/10

thanks for the feedback... In july be expecting another hot as hell open mic about my girlfriend... thanks again for the feedback and keep it coming...

Not bad, certainly. The imagery wasn't great and the vocabulary wasn't great, but the rest was nice. I like the way the flow matched the content sort of, I liked the emotion at parts, I liked the way it started out calmer and then picked up. Nice drop.

Big words aint my thing... But thanks for the feedback...

i can tell this was a deep emotional piece from the heart......very good work my crhymie. keep it up homie.....one love.....c.s.

s.v..............crhyme sindicate

Uppin this ish...

I may be the only one to say this, but I didn't like the flow. It took a while for a flow to be established and it fell off in a few spots. But besides that, you ripped it again. Liked the concept and the whole delivery :thumbup:

damn im goin through the same exact thing although he didnt apologize...good emotion, and delivery...im really feelin this......cud u drop sum feedback on no fear?it wud be appreciated...good drop...

uppin