Poison .vs. Young Smirf
 

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8-14 lines
no crew votes
no d/r votes or hate votes
verse due 35 minutes after check in.

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This dude head of tha weakest crew on Rb, 'congratulations'
I have to say this, but u an ya crew 'wack', like 'masturbation'//
An smirf? lets face it, u jus a waist of a godly creation
ya rhymes is wasted, an u need a bodily cremation//
You wouldn see a win if you wrote it on a sheet of paper
smirf you'll neva be hot, even if u lived in tha tropicals below tha equator//
Im annihilatin haters, between 'now an later'
addin this fag on tha list, cuz he sweeter than 'now-an-lators'//(candy)
when u approach 'poison-ous' things u should be 'very cautious'
cuz tha lyrics is jus so 'sickning', u could get 'very nauseous'//
u an talent don mix, like vampires an crosses
im beatn this kid like he stole money outta mah pockets//
Stop impetously writin ya 'verses', its causing u 'losses'
Im usually not a kid that 'curses', but 'DAMN' u 'loss-this'//

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A look, how you poison when i'm eatin' you up/
you need to let go of rappin' and just give up/
this nigga never even flipped a bird/
says that he's poison but only rhymin' off three words/
(congratulations,paper,and cautious) needs to widen his vocabulary/
homey if you gotta explain you puchlinesthen that's very scary/
talkn' bout i'm sweet like nowlaters when he's on Don's dick/
nigga can't be poison cuz nigga you not that sick/
and matter fact you a dick ridin' faggot who never held a gun/
look nigga you wouldn't be hard if you took viagra son/
and while niggaz thinkin' that they talkin' bout my crew they bitches/
detroit still ain't shit nigga fuck the pistons/
and you know what motherfucker niggaz know smirf's wild/
so take you sorry bitch ass to the fuckin' 8mile.

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yo ima break it down

flow poison

vocab both

humor poison

punches poison

personal's both

yea i voted here and could yall when dip set gets done go vote on my battle thankz

Poison

Im annihilatin haters, between 'now an later'
addin this fag on tha list, cuz he sweeter than 'now-an-lators'

Didn't like this one actually

smirf you'll neva be hot, even if u lived in tha tropicals below tha equator
My favo line

u an talent don mix, like vampires an crosses very nice!

Stop impetously writin ya 'verses', its causing u 'losses'
Im usually not a kid that 'curses', but 'DAMN' u 'loss-this'

Liked the internal rhyme but the "losses" and "loss-this", don't like that

Young Smirf

and matter fact you a dick ridin' faggot who never held a gun/
look nigga you wouldn't be hard if you took viagra son/

My favo line

detroit still ain't shit nigga fuck the pistons
so take you sorry bitch ass to the fuckin' 8mile

Ya tried to play "Detroit" on him but if you wanna do this, at least do it good!Cuz these lines were wack, you could've played them much better

I have to go with Poison cuz his lines were better, the punches were good, vocab and flow 2...

This wasn't a bad battle. I'm gunna go wit poison. Mainly because i knew what young smirf was gonna rhyme wit next before i even read it. Yo shit was predictable. I didn't have that same problem wit poisons. Vote - Poison

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smirf that wasnt good at all dawg ive seen better from ya

poison got this one by the punches smirf really didnt have any and if he did they didnt land but poisons landed hard
v/poison

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yo...lemme break it down...Poison yours was catchy..it had some flow to it and some meta and multis..everything was good but you lacked the personals..personals are what wins battles am i right?..sure everyone can rhyme but about their competitor..keep elevatin man..you doin good nigga

Smirf..you had alot of personals about where he lives and how he aint poison cuz you ate him up..you lacked the flow but the punches were hard and also had the multis and metas too...good battle overall

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Poison
structure was ok...some of ur lines were stretched though....flow fell off a lil because of the stretched lines....u had some metas...wordplay was pretty tight...some of ur punches connected...personals were decent...

Young Smirf
structure was ok...ur lines were uneven as hell...flow fell off because ur lines were goin everywhere...metas were pretty good...wordplay was decent....a few of ur punches connected...personals were also decent...

Overall
both had decent personals...as well as metas....neither had a good structure....and neither had a good flow....poison had better wordplay and more connecting punches...so basing off of that...poison gets my vote...

VOTE - POISON

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