nightvision vs.bcdynamic
 

its the battlegrounds respectable battle come in vote

aight checkin in i'll drop soon drop in 20 mins or else pc good luck

its time
 

yo dis due is a gay from south boston/
he be like a damn clown juggler dicks he be tossin/
dis due cant spit he jus shit/
this guy can only battle cause if he got in the game he couldnt write song/
but ima lyricaly murda dis due like b.i.g cause he dead wrong/
this guy gonna get smahed up like a damn ice cream cone/
cause ima bend in break dis due sideways like willis magahee's bone/
this guy chose to battle but his style dingy like unclean clothes/
ima leave this due like ted williams after i ryme stuck in a box in froze/
ima hit this due to the future like star wars he be gettin attack by the clones

i dont think this faggot really doesn't know]
if he was on a ragein river he still couldnt flow]
he gets it in the ass like he was back fead]
how yall got me battlen this fuckin crack head]
he aint got no teeth so he's oppisite of obie trice]
i'll put ice on his baby and he's tha 2 vanilla ice]
rhymes strike this guy like i was thunder fead]
he think's it's a pop quiz when someone say's wonder bread]
this kid bites about as hard as a fuckin masquito]
u can be mike i'll stay non rapest and be tedo]

tha 2 i forgot to put second in their o well uppin for some votes

vote
 

votes we need votes plz thanks yall good battle nightvision

bcdynamic
y do i even take the time to tell u whats wrong with ur verse if u never make an attempt to change anything...ur structure is wack again...some of ur lines were to simple, some were stretched to no end...flow fell off due the the structure wackness...no metas...wordplay was ok...a few of ur punches connected...no personals...

NightVision
structure was good...flow was on target...no metas...wordplay was decent...some of ur punches connected...no personals...

Overall
both had ok wordplay...neither had metas...neither had personals...nightvision had the better structure...the better flow...and more connecting punches...so basing off of that...nightvision gets my vote...

VOTE - NIGHTVISION

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yo dis due is a gay from south boston/
he be like a damn clown juggler dicks he be tossin/
6/10 amusing
dis due cant spit he jus shit/ why is this line there
this guy can only battle cause if he got in the game he couldnt write song/
but ima lyricaly murda dis due like b.i.g cause he dead wrong/
4/10 no comment
this guy gonna get smahed up like a damn ice cream cone/
cause ima bend in break dis due sideways like willis magahee's bone/
5/10 no comment on strength of punch ...but funny
this guy chose to battle but his style dingy like unclean clothes/
ima leave this due like ted williams after i ryme stuck in a box in froze/
4/10 the first line was better then the second in this bar
ima hit this due to the future like star wars he be gettin attack by the clones
why is this line there
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Your main problem was structure...okay you need to learn how to get the full affect from a punline. in a bar...a bar consists of two lines...the first line is supposed to be the set up then the second line is suppose to the punch..if you don't understand me get at me on Pm. you got a lot of filler lines also. go peep my battle you might understand. I coulnt find your fifth bar. With the same punches you could win this battle but you would have to word them different

NV' verse

i dont think this faggot really doesn't know]
if he was on a ragein river he still couldnt flow]
7/10 this is a good example of what i'm talkin about.
he gets it in the ass like he was back fead]
how yall got me battlen this fuckin crack head]
5/10 i sort of don't get it.
he aint got no teeth so he's oppisite of obie trice]
i'll put ice on his baby and he's tha 2 vanilla ice]
3/10 weak
rhymes strike this guy like i was thunder fead]
he think's it's a pop quiz when someone say's wonder bread]
6/10 funny
this kid bites about as hard as a fuckin masquito]
u can be mike i'll stay non rapest and be tedo]
4/10 don't get it.

structure was okay., flow is decent I thought you had what i was talking about after the first line...punches were not all that though. but you get my vote due to fact it was more understandable. and you filled every other concept other then punches

v/NV

Oh I forgot to tell you'll to peep my battle....and keep my advice. it will help

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bcdynamic
ur structure is wack .....your lines were way to simple.... but then to the end some where stretched......flow was wack becuase of you with the stretched and simple lines....wordplay was decent...a few of ur punches hitt not many...no personals...

NightVision
structure was good...your flow was decent...wordplay was decent...some of ur punches hit hard...there were no personals to be honest

Overall
vote nightvision

Yo nights flow was tight as fuck he needs work on Vocab but other than that boys got some skill, just got to work on the Vocab VOTE=Night

vocab:bcdynamics
flows:nightvishion
structure:both
punches:bcdynamics
persona.:both
overall:bcdynamics.......................

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