[Intro:]

*Rain pouring feets running*

Guy: COME BACK HERE HOE I AIN'T DONE WIT YOU!
Hoe: ahhhh........ *screaming*


I go up to that hoe whip out my "member" that's deadlier than a sword~
stuffed it in the bitch's mouth and went all the way to her spinal cord~
heads bobbing back and forth screaming out for me to finally stop~
but I wouldn't end the torture till her muthafuckin' brain pops~
brains about to splatter head swelling up & her hands just tremble~
I used my hands so with it her fuckin' body parts I disassemble~
she let out a sharp pierced cry at the top of her lungs in struggle~
she was thinkin' of her husband and the way they alwayz snuggle~
too bad I was about to take her life away with my cold heart~
thinkin' of my selfless acts which supported me to tear her apart~
finally...my fuckin' mission has been completed but I feel torn~
it's like my evil beens flushed out of my system I was reborn~
so that day I vowed to change my wayz look for a right path~
so no one again will ever in their reality feel DeLo's wrath~

rating peeps.....I did the best I can..... rating: __/10

nuthin' personal to the ladies & shit....

Originally Posted by ~Genicide~ yo immortal good stuff.... used good vocab... it was alright i really didnt like the topic but it was still hot.. i liked ur closer... soo im gonna rate this an 8/10 good job and keep up the good work

thanks for the positive feedback on this and I guess I'm getting better
at writing topics and shit.........

~DeLo A.K.A. Immortal~

oh god lol now your callin' me that its all good tho!

G-BALLZ KICKS SUM SERIOUS ASS!

im changing my username to that too peepz juss gonna PM strobe right
now!

~I.S.~

Originally Posted by HIGH-TECH ^^lol

Lyrical_Flamez=Immortal_Souljah04=G-Ballz

I got a habit of changing names!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

its all good tho peepz

~DeLo a.k.a. Immortal~

Originally Posted by Nova_Unlimited lol, a diffrent style, lol "member" havent heard that b4, nice im hit chu wit a 8/10 still..~~1~~ im not the type to hate...