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G-Ballz .VS. Hoops
rules are: 20-25 2hr 10mins to spit no hate/crew votes no biting no d/r just spit within' time limit topic is: first true love... |
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20-25 lines.. coo.. ^_^ |
hehe that was fun... :).. when you wanan post it up ?
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that special person, one from whom love is given..
spindle of hugs and kisses,giving back to them is privialged.. everyday their in your thoughts,no time for other people.. each way their steps are with you,to them your eyes are equal.. your problems are shared, and both pains are heart felt.. connected by infered, beams of ideas are both thought.. teachings are exchanged, different eras, but both true.. go about things different ways, but both stick to virtue.. when falling out occurs, love making always mends us.. bawling tears made of blood, therefore i regain trust.. never listened, always thought that i knew better.. but yet im pissed-when, i do wrong, and upset-her.. as she fades away, i understand what i have to lose.. early in relationship, did i waste the time i cant renew.. yet i plead, for her to stay, but my cries are tossed aside.. bleeding further everyday, gapens the hole in my soul inside.. lookin back on forever, something thats tabu in many cultures.. thought id be so clever, to implement her in my life structure.. truth be told, this love wasent average or quit normal.. my earths so whole, as i celebrate my first love, my mother.. |
sat down one day reminiscing about the past and what I left behind~ only thing I could think of was one woman out of all of mankind~ the memories of you were so hard to withstand it was clouded with pain~ heard the angelic whisper of your voice through my labyrinthine vein~ but I knew I still loved you with every beat in my cold fuckin' heart~ my eyes were covered with vision of your damn external body parts~ because you had it all great physique, glistening eyes & lips so luscious~ with a intellectual mind to back up perfection, what ever happened to us?~ that's the question rolling through my mind but we have no communication~ but I talk to you in my dreams hoping to find you with all my determination~ sobbing so hard this second because my souls burning without your touch~ I'm eating myself alive with nothing to grasp on on you I have no clutch~ but I know that true love has it's own way of coming back together~ just to see your face I would walk barefoot for 1000 miles with bad weather~ I trust the power of god to bring you back to me I have no doubts~ that's the only thing I believe and feel knowledgable enought about~ but I wonder will you want me too will you take me with open arms?~ will we find each other no injuries on the travel, caused no harm?~ did you find someone else to fill the empty space in your soul?~ were you seduced while in a unstable condition not in control?~ I missed you forever and I wanna tell you my feelings never changed~ but I want you to be happy if it costs me being mental and deranged...... aight I'm done peeps..... |
wow nice drop Hoops ~Big Up~
uppin 4 votes peeps leave links if ya want! |
uppin leave links and explain votes peeps!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!
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Well I would drop on this, but since i got a hate vote from both of you two. Mine would be a pretty bad hate vote, besides i cant decide which one of you id want to hate on more.
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a hate vote ?? how did we give you a hate vote brah?? you don tknow what a hate vote is... Hate is when we dont like you so we vote against you...we chose the best verse man..nothing more nothing less
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If you go back and look ive voted on 3 of your battles hoops. On one of the battles(i believe it was the last one) I said almost 95% verbatim what you said on my battle. It came off to me as if you were mocking me. Honestly I think you had the better drop on this post(hoops). Although im not going to vote on this now, as one of you may feel its unfair.
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well in all honestly, im not the kind of person that mocks ne one, nor takes into account votes recieved to myself, when voting on other battles.. im sorry if you feel that way... i Apologize if my vote came off "shady" or misrepresented me as a voter.
Still UPPING people |
Well I actually sit down and read this over. I am guessing both of you were hinting towards pieces of poetry. I must say, I am very appreciative of these types of work.
I think both of these would make good readings at any poetry reading. Minus a word or two from both of you: Hoops - Pissed(Try something like distressed) G-Ballz - Damn, Fuckin(I know it helps to show the extent of your pain, but these words come off as unintelligable) They both seemed to tie in well with each other. The flow of each was never off. I think hoops went from line to line and stanza to stanza very well. G-Ballz, you did tend to end what you were saying and go to another line with something new. The structure of both was very well. If you were reading this to someone I dont think it would matter much. Since this is visual and its left up to me to read it, I think Hoops had a better structure. He broke it down into nice stanzas, and each one stood for a period in time about his love. I.E (falling in love, in love and breaking up) It was real hard to take a pick between the two, as I did like and feel both pieces. However I felt Hoops piece had a little more of an impact on me. V/Hoops |
ok uppin 4 some vvotes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! and how did I give you a hate vote b4 QB just because I voted for DML instead of you???? ~I.S.~ |
uppity up up
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i read both of these verses and both were hot looked like yall was leanin more to poetry and thats tight i aint like tha fact of G-ballz curssin tho it shows pain but u shouldnt do that u knoe wut i mean and it was hot how i was readin hoopz verse and thought he was talkin bout a female but then str8 flipped it when he said my first love my mother that was hott and stucture was good for both i thought hoopz vese was just more intellegent tho but it was a very close battle
vote-hoopz |
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