can i get some criticism on my style
 

this is a quick 10 any feedback welcome...


i've lost a few battles, my style i start to question
maybe i'll find some answers in the open mic section
when i start checkin and try and get votes like an election
but no matter how i hard try i always seem to come second
all the feeback says i do well but my words lack structure
every text battle feels like it's the cold war and i'm russia
people came and start dissing me but victory i can taste it
there words start missing me but history repeats and i hate it
so i keep practising, elevating waiting to blow up like a bomb test
but the odds aren't on my side like mini-me in a dunk contest

More L

that was alrite dun just work on structure

^^ Wat Tha Hell He Does Have Structure...Nice Drop Nice vocab And Idk What he Think Structures Is^^ LOL

i have to agree...only positive feed back round here...nice drop...i guess u need to work on ur punchlines if uve lost 3 battles, but all the same yo u got a good style keep at it bra ~~1~~

Nova