lilchiofthachi vs mishap
 

u spit first house rules 5-10 lines first 2 5 wins 3-0 ko

yo this is mishap
i droppin rhymes like you floppin cocks
mock me ill send u a gay tree
i tried to be nice, hers some spice
ice is the best for the bitch with me
lol
jk
hes at my house
so i was just fuckin with him

you 13 living at home off your mommas wealth
two days ago was the first time you dress yo self
tell yo hole crew to fuck off im rollin on my own
you half field with bitches, but all want to bone
take a step into the detroit chitown has been played out
rap battles is for emcess you should just stay home and pout
this is a mishap that u try to get played and signed
with no shows u wont get layed, buts it all fine
now i need to check to yor licencse and registraition b4 i spit it
cause ur pg13 and im rated R your just not permitted

yo you got 2 days with no shows that a win for me a ko so u bets to show up phoney so hurry up the clocks a tickin tic toc tic toc
:thefinger :help: :thefinger :laugh2: :laugh2:

yo drop an honest explained vote on this battle..and ill come back and drop a vote on this wen he spits http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132816

iight imma go slow for ya,watch ur mouth round strangers like ur mom told ya/
u cant dis tha Chi u from Detroit 8 mile,only reason u wanna rep cause Eminem been hot for a while/i kno u was taken notes from slim shady,u aint kno good and ur rhymes is lazy/ ive seen babys make betta rhymes then u,Tha Killas will take u and ur fake crew/and ya im pg13 u gotta problem wit dat,rated r is played jus like ur rap

uppin for votes.....................................

ok this is the way stuff goes

mishap/good structure i like the opener, i didnt really understand this line
you half field with bitches, but all want to bone/ did u meen to say half filled??
and how can a person be half filled with bitches?? or were you talkin about their crew?? over all u had good punches the finisher shouldve been the starter u had some good personals not many didnt really hit hard and thats pretty much all u needed to improve

lilchiofthachi/

very week punches i couldnt stand the structure u decided to use and did u have personals?? u had ok personals but the eminem and detroit thing is gettin played out
u had a better finisher but i think it still couldve been better
v/mishap

this vote is just because of an overall better performance

ok man this battle was doomed from the beggining.
to mishap: never try to go on someones name, especially since there are more teens the grown men on this site. and ya punches were't that great

to L: ya structure was really off. and ya punches were off also

so this was a terrible battle, but it all came dow to structure and punches. L didnt have much of eiter.
vote/Mishap

blah horrible battle... but mishap was better overall both of u need to elevate real bad.. better punches and flow and structure go to mishap so does my vote

VOTE: MISHAP

alright, nice battle nice battle......my vote's comin up.

props to both battlers, decent battle today, but here's the verdict.

Oh yeah, return the favor and drop an honest vote on at least one of my battles(in the sig)

mishap-you had a good opener, and nice structure, i'm going to have to agree and say that i didn't understand the ''half field with bitches'' line, at all. and it's all about the crowd's thoughts, so something like that really hurts you in a battle. but overall i liked it, you hit him with personals throughout the whole verse, and that is key.

lilchi-decent use of the personal. he's from detroit so you went at his city. that's good. but the problem is the disses lacked creativity. Your structure does need quite a bit of work, but i can see potential. You've just got to want it. what line did the first line rhyme with? You see, me even having to ask that question is a key indicator that you have bad structure. Take examples from my verses, on my battles to kind of get a feel for what good structure is. One can have the best lyrics ever, but if you dont have good flow and structure to execute the rhymes, then ya verse can fall on deaf ears. Keep at it though.

vote=mishap

please return the favor and vote on my battles(in the sig)

thanks a lot.

i'll vote on this............ if you vote on this

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=134848

^vote on that first

i only need 20 more posts to vote.........................