Battle: A.k.a. Vs Unfortunate
 

ayo checking in and if i'm wasting my time on your weak ass then you better spit after me and not run like a bitch(we are no you are)

yo you need to get my name off yo shit casuse its weak fake ass im here to check so shut the fuck up and just get busted

this cat was laughing at my record but he hide his cause it so pitiful//
i drag this cat throught the wood with no head on cause i'm just that sinacol//
my dick is like nicateen cause you can't get off no matter how hard you try//
i let you no that after battle me this kid is gonna ask why//
i fuck this kids mom and she did even care that i killed him she was like how unfortunate//
see if you gonna battle me then later thats what you gonna resent//
way to go you rep the willow oh what where thatt never heard of it//
i spit this hot shit so this dude gonna be a banana and split//
this cat is all talk like a rapper but he ain't got no skill//
call me a rollar coster cause i'm give you a thill//
this battle is over and done before you even rap//
look i'm done rapping against newbs that just spit crap//

yo yo yo checkin in this shit was quic so here it is now lets get some votes drop your links here to your battles and will repay the favor
yo look i aint in your crew so take me out, twisted goverment is dead
go book a ticket to get in my crew scout, you a hoe so give me head
you better get inspected before u get infected by the rhymes i hit
big lip nigga thowing down signs hold on i got to eat ur sisters clit
getting your ass beat by a newb like a bitch so put on this skirt
representin the gs your like a groupie,dump yo ass in a pile of dirt
your drowning in a pool of your own blood dont yell cause you wont be hurd
no one likes u so dont think anyone cares when u die nigga thats just absurd
critical this to battle beneficial to the site ill beat you ne day
take this fake ass easy e away ill rip him like some paper mache

yo i fucked up i forgot to put this 2 lines down

yo look i aint in your crew so take me out, twisted goverment is dead
go book a ticket to get in my crew scout, you a hoe so give me head
you better get inspected before u get infected by the rhymes i hit
big lip nigga thowing down signs hold on i got to eat ur sisters clit
getting your ass beat by a newb like a bitch so put on this skirt
representin the gs your like a groupie,dump yo ass in a pile of dirt
your drowning in a pool of your own blood dont yell cause you wont be hurd
no one likes u so dont think anyone cares when u die nigga thats just absurd
i bomb yo ass worse then usa did russia, sittin in dispair they just threw rocks
load the ak-47 im getting ready to kill you, your last word are i love the cocks
critical this to battle beneficial to the site ill beat you ne day
take this fake ass easy e away ill rip him like some paper mache

lets get this uppin for votes drop a link to your battle will repay the favor just vote first and the part about russia is cause hes from their

aka got ripped by his own hed of defence lmfao u suk

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uppin for votes lets get some votes in here

Punches-Unfortunate
Personals-Tie (AKA played of unfortunates name and Unf. delivered a crew punch)
Flow-Unfortunate
Opener-Tie...both decent
Closer-Unfortunate....AKA's was too simplistic
Overall-Unfortunate

Close battle tho....decent shit from both ya's....keep at it

can ya'll drop votes on these battle threads plz....peace
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132614
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132724

opener AKA
Personals Unfortunate
Multies Nobody
Vocab AKA
Wordplay Unfortunate
Structure Nobody
Punches Aka
Closer Aka

Aka- need to work on structure and spelling so us readers can understand more.
I see potential...you need stronger punches and reword them to get the full
effect. no multies that I saw. also come with some personals...some good
ones. An okay verse

Unfortunate- you need to work on structure as well. I noticed that you tried to
come with punches I mean alot of them...but some didnt make sense
do you feel me I think a lot of others will think same. no multies. You
You were more on the personal side I thought ....

V/Aka close battle though

this was a very close battle but i really think aka .. got this one ..

this cat was laughing at my record but he hide his cause it so pitiful//
i drag this cat throught the wood with no head on cause i'm just that sinacol//
lol... first line was hot but the second was alittle played
my dick is like nicateen cause you can't get off no matter how hard you try//
i let you no that after battle me this kid is gonna ask why//
Naw not really feelin that line ..one of your weakest
i fuck this kids mom and she did even care that i killed him she was like how unfortunate//
see if you gonna battle me then later thats what you gonna resent//
decent line but the moma part was good in like 3 grade
way to go you rep the willow oh what where thatt never heard of it//
i spit this hot shit so this dude gonna be a banana and split//
lol... pretty played but good
this cat is all talk like a rapper but he ain't got no skill//
call me a rollar coster cause i'm give you a thill//
okay decent ..but simple
this battle is over and done before you even rap//
look i'm done rapping against newbs that just spit crap//
lol iight decent closer


unfortunate
yo look i aint in your crew so take me out, twisted goverment is dead
go book a ticket to get in my crew scout, you a hoe so give me head
Hell naw the first line was dope but the second was wack
you better get inspected before u get infected by the rhymes i hit
big lip nigga thowing down signs hold on i got to eat ur sisters clit
naw wack line wasnt really feelin that
getting your ass beat by a newb like a bitch so put on this skirt
representin the gs your like a groupie,dump yo ass in a pile of dirt
decent
your drowning in a pool of your own blood dont yell cause you wont be hurd
no one likes u so dont think anyone cares when u die nigga thats just absurd
lol...decent line probably one of your best
i bomb yo ass worse then usa did russia, sittin in dispair they just threw rocks
load the ak-47 im getting ready to kill you, your last word are i love the cocks
naw that was pretty played out already
critical this to battle beneficial to the site ill beat you ne day
take this fake ass easy e away ill rip him like some paper mache
decent closer


opener:tie
Personals Unfortunate
Multies:none
Vocab AKA
Wordplay Unfortunate
Structure:none
Punches:aka
Closer:aka

vote=aka
just barely

uppin and tell me what the hell kind of vote was that the one the dj lightwieght did.

really close battle
aka
you need serious help work or anything u can get on ya structure
you had fair punches and you beat him in that match up..
u had ok opersonalz...overall 6.7/10

unfortanate..
you hd slightly better strucutre but you lacked vocab..
you guyz are batteling very newbish and need to fix it..
bottom line..your punches didnt hit quite as hard as aka's
and thats why you lost overall 6.4/10
vote aka.. by the hair on his nutz

super close battle

A.K.A:

Structure: 5/10
Flow: 6/10
Openor: 6/10
Closer: 6/10
Punches: 5/10
Personals: 6.5/10
Overall: 34.5/50

Unfortunate:

Structure: 6/10
Flow: 5/10
Openor: 6/10
Closer: 6/10
Punches: 6/10
Personals: 5/10
Overall: 34/50

Vote: AKA