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XxjimmywhitexX 07-04-04 03:04 PM

dawgfatha_13 vs JimmyWhite
 
10 bars mas
first to 5 votes wins
3-0 ko
no dr, hate, crew, unexplained, pussy votes

holla n check in...i really dont give a shit who goes first...its just another win for me...lets get it over with

FLooZe 07-04-04 06:22 PM

what the fuck? when did i agree to this shit?

XxjimmywhitexX 07-05-04 05:14 PM

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=133112

dumb shit

FLooZe 07-05-04 08:10 PM

oh sorry,i guess i did.k ill spit

Intro:
ayo...
Jimmy white tried to catch me by surprise,but when he looked in my eyes,he saw death staring right in the face,bich aint shit but a disgrace,imma dance you outta yo place,when i catch up better embrace my fist but i call it my mace//

This is gonna blow your way like your 50 cent hoes
My punches will 'blow you away' like George Bush to Saddam
Watch out homie,don't step on my toes
The government will laugh as I kill you,they don't give a damn
My best friend is a member or Parlament
So that explains your cut job,with a reason backed by government
Please don't complain
You're retarted mentality,is hard to explain//


Blind spit.your turn.

XxjimmywhitexX 07-07-04 02:38 AM

Dawgfather? Haha 700 posts somthin only to show a spit like that...lmao 20 posts...haha ight here we go...

:laugh2:

{1}
Ayo Im critical hittin full to be spittin whole for rapbattlez writtens without hesitance,
this bitch spittin politcal? you spit at blues clues level or as if dr. duess ran for president (basic rhymes + polotical = dawgbitch)
{2}
Im mystikal with fists full of lists full of punches to leave ya heart beat minimal wit the lifeline hittin flat,
you cant spit raps, i got subliminal gats to create ya fate in a criminal rap, 'dawg' ill leave ya deprived of a mind like lacy petersons ass.
{3}
Time to expose hoes like loose pussy in church clothes,
or like dawgfather on rapbattlez set in the ring wit the lyrical godfathers flows...
{4}
I see ya quote in rapbattlez "HATERS SUCK MY FUCKING DICK",
well with 90 percent male emcees on the site, you want to get blow'd by all dudes wit an occasional chick?? (nasty shit)
{5}
Im debatin this 700 post subliminal newbie with hope,
even if you legally changed ya name to marijuana, you still wouldnt be dope
{6}
You 'smoke dolg', man your thirteen and this cat acts like he knew a 'g', (check his profile)
screw this geek, my punches will hit ya harder than ya puberty! (lmfaooooo)
{7}
I hope you fear this, or at least fear fate cuz dawg you almot near it,
no joke, i dont give a fuck if you cant breathe, ill still hold to choke ya spirit
{8}
The only thing dope in this battle are my lyrics,
the dawgfather_13 being ill is like grizzly adams being beardless. (lmao im watching happy gilmore)
{9}
Shit not even a mother could love you...you think you a challenge to me? WELL FUCK YOU,
the only reason why it seems like im talkin down to ya ass is because im literally a level above you!
{10}
{calm flow}
now to this early teen, hidden under floorboards, thrown away literally cuz his ass was the family disgrace, mainly a mistake,
sHIT fuck a 'mase', welcome to above ground and dont mind the burning fLEsh scent, its just the smell of youR fate...


lmao that was so half assed i almost feel bad

vote up

XxjimmywhitexX 07-07-04 04:47 PM

vote up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

a k w o r d Z 07-08-04 01:31 AM

Intro:
ayo...
Jimmy white tried to catch me by surprise,but when he looked in my eyes,he saw death staring right in the face,bich aint shit but a disgrace,imma dance you outta yo place,when i catch up better embrace my fist but i call it my mace//

ehhhhh... real real real real basic, looks like you were trying to go for some multis, but no...

This is gonna blow your way like your 50 cent hoes
My punches will 'blow you away' like George Bush to Saddam
Watch out homie,don't step on my toes
The government will laugh as I kill you,they don't give a damn

in the first half of that part, the content is PLAYYYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD AS FUCK, then the second half was just weak... "watch out homie, dont step on my toes" uh oh... blah, not to mention i hated the A B A B rhymescheme you used...

My best friend is a member or Parlament
So that explains your cut job,with a reason backed by government

ok, went from ABAB to barely even rhyming... and thats a gay ass rhyme to barely be rhyming

Please don't complain
You're retarted mentality,is hard to explain//

what the fuck? was this your closer because you thought it was good, or because you thought this verse was so wack you shouldn't humiliate yourself any further?

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{1}
Ayo Im critical hittin full to be spittin whole for rapbattlez writtens without hesitance,
this bitch spittin politcal? you spit at blues clues level or as if dr. duess ran for president (basic rhymes + polotical = dawgbitch)

i get it, but im not really feelin it, seems like it could've been alot better

{2}
Im mystikal with fists full of lists full of punches to leave ya heart beat minimal wit the lifeline hittin flat,

i thought this was good

you cant spit raps, i got subliminal gats to create ya fate in a criminal rap, 'dawg' ill leave ya deprived of a mind like lacy petersons ass.

ehhhh... not feelin this... the punches content, not the exact person, but i've seen these types of lines millions of times

{3}
Time to expose hoes like loose pussy in church clothes,
or like dawgfather on rapbattlez set in the ring wit the lyrical godfathers flows...

... i didn't like this

{4}
I see ya quote in rapbattlez "HATERS SUCK MY FUCKING DICK",
well with 90 percent male emcees on the site, you want to get blow'd by all dudes wit an occasional chick?? (nasty shit)

this was good, made me laugh on the inside, not out loud though

{5}
Im debatin this 700 post subliminal newbie with hope,
even if you legally changed ya name to marijuana, you still wouldnt be dope

that content is old & played... i used similar lines to this like 4-5 years ago...


{6}
You 'smoke dolg', man your thirteen and this cat acts like he knew a 'g', (check his profile)
screw this geek, my punches will hit ya harder than ya puberty! (lmfaooooo)

funny, yeah,original? no...

{7}
I hope you fear this, or at least fear fate cuz dawg you almot near it,
no joke, i dont give a fuck if you cant breathe, ill still hold to choke ya spirit

i liked this better than some of your other lines

{8}
The only thing dope in this battle are my lyrics,
the dawgfather_13 being ill is like grizzly adams being beardless. (lmao im watching happy gilmore)

i haven't seen happy gilmore in forever... so no comment

{9}
Shit not even a mother could love you...you think you a challenge to me? WELL FUCK YOU,
the only reason why it seems like im talkin down to ya ass is because im literally a level above you!

good wordplay...

{10}
{calm flow}
now to this early teen, hidden under floorboards, thrown away literally cuz his ass was the family disgrace, mainly a mistake,
sHIT fuck a 'mase', welcome to above ground and dont mind the burning fLEsh scent, its just the smell of youR fate...

good wordplay... i thought the bar as a whole was alright




only thing you really need to work on is your strected bars, and being more creative with your punches...


my vote goes to XxjimmywhitexX... cuz anything could beat dawgfatha13's ass verse

XxjimmywhitexX 07-08-04 07:53 PM

0-1 vote up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!

J Gutta 07-08-04 08:00 PM

aight mayne
dawg elevate.. white u got this
open:white
finisher:white
flow;white
punches:white
complexity:white
overall:white

overall i like jimmywhites verse a lot better...
v.jimmyWhite
holla at my battles in ma sig plz wun

XxjimmywhitexX 07-09-04 04:44 PM

vote up!!!!!! 0-2 jimmywhite

dont sleep vote up!!

mistah_tate 07-09-04 04:54 PM

ok i really don't have much to say about dawgfathas verse, it was pretty bad, the punches were weak, the structure was fucked up and the creativy wasn't there at all, that was pretty horrible to have been around so long.

jimmy did a good job taking what dawgfatha said in his opener and twistin it around so it could be used against him, most of your punches were decent, structure was a little bit off, but u werent up against much so my vote goes to jimmy

XxjimmywhitexX 07-10-04 04:00 PM

no doubt...jimmywhite ko'd dawgfather_13 for the record lol jp holla back

Magic5 07-10-04 04:19 PM

dawgfather_13
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...structure was wack...flow fell off cause of ur structure wackness...u had a few metas...wordplay was wack...none of ur punches connected...no good personals...

XxjimmywhitexX
dont number ur lines holmes...thats newbish...structure wasnt good...all of ur lines were stretched....flow fell off cause of the stretchness...u had some metas...wordplay was tight...some of ur punches connected...ok personals...

Overall
neither had a good structure...neither had a good flow...XxjimmywhitexX had more metas...better wordplay...more connecting punches...and more personals...so basing off of that XxjimmywhitexX gets my vote...

VOTE - XXJIMMYWHITEXX

PLEASE return the favor with an honest vote on the link in my sig...thanx...

BrOtHa-HoOd 07-11-04 04:46 PM

opener - j.w
closer - j.w
creativity - j.w
struc - j.w
flow - j.w

overall - j.w

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