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Decree Wun 07-04-04 09:12 PM

State Capitol Vs Mixtape
 
alright lez get this shit poppin......

10-14 lines
no dr cv biting
no feeding
blind spit
2 hours to spit after check in
good luck

Decree Wun 07-04-04 09:34 PM

checkin in................................................ ....

Wicked One 07-04-04 09:41 PM

Checkin in................................................ .

Decree Wun 07-04-04 10:33 PM

Gettin tackled like rugby, no padding on, Your Raps Are Ugly,
I think your lines forgot to take their beauty sleep..........
Cause Cuttin' Your Verse Far Into Your Skin,
Is The Only Way Your Lyrics Are Deep....................
Your Wackness Is exposed to many viewers,
Like The play-Boy Channel...............
The Closest To Creative Punches you'll ever get,
Is Clicking On The Control Panel..........
Kid Lacks Power, This Coward, Will Get Ripped N' Devoured..............
Your soft like ur body wen u just get out da shower,
who knows what kinda wackness he'll spit in a couple of hours.............
I "Intend", to spit anthrax on Queer's best friend,
so don't open any PM's i might send.....................
Your Lines are similar to a Horses Rear End................
Kids Lines Are as Hot as Bitches sittin in the free Clinic..............
I Checked your battle stats,
there was no hard defeat in-it..........................
How Can he be so wack, when he's from the home of the legends..........
Each Line I spit, Your Loss Is Edgin.....................
shouldnt of checked, rob you from your Money and cheques.........
if actors rapped,
You'd Be the Steven Siegal Of text............... (very bad actor)


thats 14 lines playa......................

Wicked One 07-04-04 11:03 PM

You started this gauge, my mentals pack showing this bitch is wack…
He'll lose so bad, he'll do a Ja Rule and Clap Back…
My styles are wicked, evil crowds in thickness…
Yeah State spits sick shit....after his bowels get twisted…
Come out that closet! don't fake son, just be yourself…
State could beat me(nah), yeah, once I unsheath my belt…
Whoa Whoa, State chill!!, I'm not your damn pops…
Cause if I did, you'll be a “Marvel” like the one eyed like cyclops…
Don't get it backwards, I hate this fake rapper with passion…
But moderate it slowly like rations…
Any chance you have?Take it whether its a sucker punch,or low blow…
Like Nate Dogg was speaking to you personally about this battle when singing the song..like "O,, NO!”…
State’s rhymes couldn't be 'Multi' if he ripped with a speaker…
Don't even post,save your rhymes, it's the only way you spit keepers…

Know-Gimix 07-04-04 11:48 PM

This battle was dope- tough to decide a winner here so Ima have to break it down line for line.........
Gettin tackled like rugby, no padding on, Your Raps Are Ugly,
I think your lines forgot to take their beauty sleep..........
Cause Cuttin' Your Verse Far Into Your Skin,
Is The Only Way Your Lyrics Are Deep....................
The rhyme scheme is kind of strange- but decent opening line, and the last two lines are pretty good- decent wordplay o.k punch - 7/10
Your Wackness Is exposed to many viewers,
Like The play-Boy Channel...............
The Closest To Creative Punches you'll ever get,
Is Clicking On The Control Panel..........
This was o.k- The concept was there but not one of your better punches in this battle
6/10
Kid Lacks Power, This Coward, Will Get Ripped N' Devoured..............
Your soft like ur body wen u just get out da shower,
Decent wordplay- good flow some multi work in here, the punch wasn't great but not bad either.... 7/10
who knows what kinda wackness he'll spit in a couple of hours.............
I "Intend", to spit anthrax on Queer's best friend,
so don't open any PM's i might send.....................
I honestly don't know what it is about these couple lines but I really like it... just a subtle insult- the flow goes nicely- I like it... 7/10
Your Lines are similar to a Horses Rear End................
Kids Lines Are as Hot as Bitches sittin in the free Clinic..............
I Checked your battle stats,
there was no hard defeat in-it..........................
Wasn't really feelin the first bar here, but I liked the second... decent personal - 7/10
How Can he be so wack, when he's from the home of the legends..........
Each Line I spit, Your Loss Is Edgin.....................
shouldnt of checked, rob you from your Money and cheques.........
if actors rapped,
You'd Be the Steven Siegal Of text
First bar- flowed well... decent insult, no wordplay- third line was kind of filler but the closing line was dope... I chuckled on that Steven Segal shit.... 8/10
42/60 total.
You started this gauge, my mentals pack showing this bitch is wack…
He'll lose so bad, he'll do a Ja Rule and Clap Back…
decent opener, but wack and back is kind of a basic rhyme - nice wordplay though - 7/10
My styles are wicked, evil crowds in thickness…
Yeah State spits sick shit....after his bowels get twisted…
the first line flowed good, but it was filler... the second line was a nice punch, good wordplay - 7/10
Come out that closet! don't fake son, just be yourself…
State could beat me(nah), yeah, once I unsheath my belt…
this rhymed really well, I dunno about using the word unsheath here though- but I see where the punch was going... 7/10
Whoa Whoa, State chill!!, I'm not your damn pops…
Cause if I did, you'll be a “Marvel” like the one eyed like cyclops…
Don't get it backwards, I hate this fake rapper with passion…
But moderate it slowly like rations…
Not really feelin this part of your verse... I think everything was pretty consistent up to here and the marvel punch is pretty good, but the second bar stops abruptly and really hears the flow, and it doesn't have a real solid punch or any great wordplay 6/10
Any chance you have?Take it whether its a sucker punch,or low blow…
Like Nate Dogg was speaking to you personally about this battle when singing the song..like "O,, NO!”…
Struc went off alot- I liked the punch here and I think this coulda won the battle for you- as it is though its still good.. 7/10
State’s rhymes couldn't be 'Multi' if he ripped with a speaker…
Don't even post,save your rhymes, it's the only way you spit keepers
This closer was dope- nice flow, and wordplay- this punch hit very nicely, it was probably the hardest line in this battle.. 9/10
overall 43/60 --- Like I said.. this battle was very close - It came down to both of your closers, and I think Mixtape just barely edged him out. Good job both... Good luck in the future- I'd really apreciate an honest vote from both of you -
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132453

Terumoto 07-05-04 12:02 AM

mixtape: a nice verse. loved that closer.. the rest of your punches didnt come off as hard though... nice flow, structure, and decent wordplay.

state: a bit of an unusual rhyme scheme. It doesnt look too pretty, but it works if you say it out loud.. so theres nothing wrong with your flow. To me, your punches came harder.. and although your closer wasnt as good as mixtapes, the actual verse was better. Some nice wordplay.

v/ State capitol

return the favour. need votes on me vs hoops, in my sig

Gods son 07-05-04 12:02 AM

iight...this battle was alright..i didnt really know who to vote for..umm both flows were whack..mixtape had a better flow overall..SC u couldnt rhyme in the first half of the battle..so i was like wtf? umm punches? both of you had some funny ones but mixtape pulled ahead with that..

vote mixtape.

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

Orijinal 07-05-04 12:29 AM

Nice battle, look's like a good match-up.

I liked State's flow in this it was very different than any ordinary battles, which I liked. He was very creative in his rhyming aswell and his punchlines. Your flow wasn't to well though.

Mixtape, your opener is real real play'd right now. About Ja Rule and Clap Back, ain't workin' no more. But your closer was good. Also, I liked your flow through the whole verse. I didn't like your punches though.

Here it breaks down:

Opener: State
Punches: State
Personals: Mixtape
Flow: Mixtape
Structure: State
Vocabulary: Tied

Vote-State

Orijinal 07-05-04 12:30 AM

Oh yeah.. Can yall hit up this battle, vote honestly & professionally.
Orijinal -VS- datruth29
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=133085

Decree Wun 07-05-04 12:30 AM

jea...yo can u poll vote this ish bruh.................

Durmil 07-05-04 12:30 AM

SC:
Gettin tackled like rugby, no padding on, Your Raps Are Ugly,
I think your lines forgot to take their beauty sleep..........
Cause Cuttin' Your Verse Far Into Your Skin,
Is The Only Way Your Lyrics Are Deep....................
this was okay...nothin great...6/10
Your Wackness Is exposed to many viewers,
Like The play-Boy Channel...............
The Closest To Creative Punches you'll ever get,
Is Clicking On The Control Panel..........
decent punch...wordplay was ight...7/10
Kid Lacks Power, This Coward, Will Get Ripped N' Devoured..............
Your soft like ur body wen u just get out da shower,
who knows what kinda wackness he'll spit in a couple of hours.............
meh..wasnt really feelin it...didnt hit hard...5/10
I "Intend", to spit anthrax on Queer's best friend,
so don't open any PM's i might send.....................
Your Lines are similar to a Horses Rear End................
first line was cool...third line is played....6/10
Kids Lines Are as Hot as Bitches sittin in the free Clinic..............
I Checked your battle stats,
there was no hard defeat in-it..........................
decent personal...1st line was ight...7.5/10
How Can he be so wack, when he's from the home of the legends..........
Each Line I spit, Your Loss Is Edgin.....................
1st line tight....2nd ehhh, kinda ruined the bar...6/10
shouldnt of checked, rob you from your Money and cheques.........
if actors rapped,
You'd Be the Steven Siegal Of text............... (very bad actor)
closer was cool...nothin special but tight...7.5/10
Overall-45/70

You started this gauge, my mentals pack showing this bitch is wack…
He'll lose so bad, he'll do a Ja Rule and Clap Back…
ight i guess....6/10
My styles are wicked, evil crowds in thickness…
Yeah State spits sick shit....after his bowels get twisted…
decent...had some multi's...7.5/10
Come out that closet! don't fake son, just be yourself…
State could beat me(nah), yeah, once I unsheath my belt…
meh...6/10Whoa Whoa, State chill!!, I'm not your damn pops…
Cause if I did, you'll be a “Marvel” like the one eyed like cyclops…
wordplay was ight...coulda been worder better....7/10
Don't get it backwards, I hate this fake rapper with passion…
But moderate it slowly like rations…
structure was off...but i liked that rations line...7/10Any chance you have?Take it whether its a sucker punch,or low blow…
Like Nate Dogg was speaking to you personally about this battle when singing the song..like "O,, NO!”…
decent...7/10
State’s rhymes couldn't be 'Multi' if he ripped with a speaker…
Don't even post,save your rhymes, it's the only way you spit keepers…
best bar of the battle...8/10
Overall-48.5/70

Winner-Mixtape

QBsmasher 07-05-04 12:33 AM

This battle was aight, I was feelin it. State capitol you gotta do somethin with that structure, I seen your rhyme scheme but put your structure together better so you can see it. Like dude said it sound good when you read it out loud, but when you look at it its totally wack. You had some hard hittin punches though, I thought state had a more consistent punch scheme than mixtape did. Shit was ill, MIXTAPE the closer on your battle was fuckin syck....highlight of the battle by far, I thought state was better throughout though.

VERY VERY VERY MINIMAL v/state

Durmil 07-05-04 12:33 AM

and can u both drop an Honest vote on this battle of mine....i did take the time to breakdown ur vote and i was fair....peace
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132945

QBsmasher 07-05-04 12:36 AM

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=133225

Holla back...and drop a vote on my shit if ya dont mind. Thanks


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