EyeDentdy vs. JaeBurnz354
 

Ok it will be

10 Lines
No dickriding
No recycaling
No crew votes
Must post 1 hour someone spits

You go first EyeDentdy

wait, wat? did I except this, I honestly dont remember. and 10 lines? thats kinda stupid but I'll check in, why do we need an hour for 10 lines? owell, I'll spit than homie, good luck. No beef iieght.

My punchlined know karati, metaphore'll make U backflip/
even after Ur surgery, J still dont amount to all the pussy I get/

D-Block dont like U, U being hood is all fake/
this niggas from Jers?, but he was raised in Melros place/

and its good U wanna elivate, but an hour, now thats rediculouse/
It gives U enough time to search Ur rymes up on the internet/

U dont want beef, my shit is "lean quisine" in under 30 seconds/
U wanna be a vet, U still aint even a probable battle contestent/

cuz my verse is like dilivery, under 30 minutes and its still hot/
the only way U'll get famouse, is if I get U to end Up on the back of a milk box/

Ur turn homie.

and no feeding, that'd be fucked up feel me. Uppin for votes yo.

Nigga beating you is well into my ability.
This dude gone get locked up on a case of mistaken Eyedentdy/
Tryin to be suttin he not.
Nigga don't think bout gettin shot so you can sell like Pac/
I guess the bronx was too hard since you moved to L.A.
Maybe cause you's a fat nigga, stick to singin Jazy Phae/
The only way you will claim a gang is by getting a fake ruff ryder chain.
What the fuck is going on in the brain, cause I'll disconnect ya spinal cord from the rest of ya frame/
When you in a battle with me you at my mercy.
My flow sick, just lookin at it got you feelin all tospy turvey/

Yo I hear some of ya rhymes befo homey I hope u not recycaling.

no, which ones? let mr know and I'll check and write another verse if Its true. U probably think that my flow is the same or something. I was spitin from the dome though but its Nice to know I gotta fan, and also, My stuff says Im in FLA, thats Florida not L.A. but ok. tight verse kid. lets get them votes in.

Iv gotten personals from lost to misstaken EyeDentdy, be lil more creative homie, I aint hatin or nothin cuz net beef is just dumb shit but Im just sayin, I heard that line in atleast 3 out 5 of my battles. I'm got have change my name "LoSt ChiLd" or some shit just to give niggaz more obvouse things to talk about.LoL, yo get tem votes in.

EyeDentdy
get rid of / at the end of ur lines...its gay...structure is ok...some of ur lines were stretched though...flow was ok, it fell off a lil though...no metas...wordplay was pretty simple, but decent...a few of ur punches connected...no good personals..

JaeBurnz354
like i told eyedentdy, get rid of the / at the end of ur lines...structure was wack...u had lines short as hell, then switched to lines stretched as hell...flow fell off BAD cause of ur wack structure...a few metas...wordplay was simple, and wack...a few of ur punches connected...no good personals...

Overall
JaeBurnz354 had more metas...both had a few connecting punches...and neither had good personals...EyeDentdy had the better structure, as well as the more stable flow...he also had better wordplay...so basing off of that...EyeDentdy came with the better overall verse so he gets my vote...

VOTE - EYEDENTDY

Please return the favor with an honest vote in the link in my sig...thanx guys...

[QUOTE=JaeBurnz354]
I guess the bronx was too hard since you moved to L.A.
QUOTE]

ACTUALLY, SOUTH CENTRAL L.A IS A MORE DANGEROUS PLACE TO LIVE...

Also it does say that he is in Florida, so that didn't make sense.. The punchlines were lacking in both departments to me.. I did like Eyednty's line about delivery on the last bar though... eyednty's stucture and flow was also a lil bit better.... Jae's verse seemed like it was wrote by someone younger than me, so I wasn't feeling it..

vote/eyednty

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I think Eyedentdy had a better flow and structure a few streched lines though. Jaeburnz was decent when ya said it out loud but it wasnt amazing.

The punches I thought, JaeBurnz was comin harder with. I had heard a few of the ones that Eye was usin before. I thought Jae was a lil more consistent with the punches though, and they were connecting harder.

The metas Jae was hittin a lot harder with, Eye aint use too many good ones.

I thought Jae was more consistent from start to finish with this battle, although he needs to work on his structure and flow some.

v/Jaeburnz354

yo lyrical flowz if i had better shit then eyedentdy and u gave me it cuz it was a lil cloer then why u give him the vote it made no sense

uh, it aint that seriouse. U wrote an ok verse, I just wanna know which lines I recycled like I said, I'll rewrite my verse if its true. I aint lookin to start net beef no mo so just holler at me about this.

yo why everything i say you got something bad to say word up you kinda wildin but anyway nah i just hate when people say you did this and that and they feelin you and you win their vote but they don't give you the poll i hate it.Yah sayin

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