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[A.I.]Re$tricted Vs. Hoops[HWC]
CREW BATTLE TOPICAL ::.Rules.:: 26 Linez Max 5 Votez Winz No Crew No Hate No D/R Spits Due By 11 pm 7-08-04 Topic: Misunderstood ~R~ |
Checkin in.. Best of Wishes.
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Ch-Check ~R~ |
very often do meanings get caught up in the mix..
the aftermath so ravage, the results so tragic.. in-reversable to the world,whats done cant un-be.. listen close as i begin telling the story of brittny.. young women comming up,good grades and well mannered.. soon to be mixed up with the wrong crowds,rep slanted.. only wanted to be known,popularity was the key.. dressing in short clothes,started doing mean things.. ignoring former friends,they saw her attitude change.. she thought thats what it took to be in the popular ring.. Junior in highschool,g.p.a dropped to hell.. colleges were shocked,ignored her applys for there chair.. the things she would do,inraged her parents and family.. they thought they had failed,she was a calamity.. outkast to all sane,nobody good of heart wanted her.. damaged by thoughts of fame,still popularity taunted her.. her mind started workin differently,casualty of envy.. comming up on her graduation,so far no one was attending.. she saw the change that had become a reality of the world.. one last action taking place,that will change the fate of this girl.. one evening she was with her "friends" in a store,late night.. her "buddy" pulled out a pistol, and obviosly was-high.. demanded the money in the bag, now brittny starts to cry.. claims she didnt know,that this man intended to shoot the guy.. jailed for life is this Girl,for popularity she longed.. hit on is she now, in jail now does she belong.. ^shes pretty popular in jail now... based on a family member |
::..::Misunderstood::..:: Mystery Placement..Always A Drift In Basements.. Mystikal Statements..Views Opposite Adjaceiant.. Thought Patterns Pacing..Blood Pressure Racing.. The Demons I'm Facing..Atheiest I'm Embracing.. Sent To Me By Satin..Insults Fueding Degrading.. I'm Constantly Debating..But My Sanity Is Fading.. I Just Strive To Survive..But No Resistance To Lie.. I'ma End Up Lying and Dieing..In Pity and Crying.. The City Implying..Denying The Efforts I'm Applying.. Jobs I'm Applying..They Say I'm Defying Unrelying.. No Steady Job For Years..Sincere Apologies To Dear.. Antheology Was Near..Hooked On Drugs, Pills, and Beer.. It's Been A Struggle..To Juggle Life Goods To Smuggle.. Then To Go Home To Wifey..Forget That Shit and Snuggle.. Two Worlds I'm Liven..Two Choices I'm Made To Be Given.. Anticapation Has Driven Me..Sorrow Full Of Epiphany.. Damn... Wish I Could..Revise Time Back To My Prime and Re-Climb.. Collect Every Pennie and Dime..Hope Jobs of Part-Time.. Still I..Cry At Night Shy At Sight Try and Fly At Fright.. But I..Fall Heavy and Lift Lite This Life Has No More Light.. For Me..God Has Evicted Pulled His Pants Down and Shitted.. Yea Admit It..My Life Has No Meaning The Pain Is Inflicted.. Its Sickening..True Hood No Not Good Change If I Could.. You Fake Thugz..While I Live It..Your Just Misunderstood.. ~R~ |
^nice drop.. uppin for some votes.. leave a link and an honest vote is guranteed :)
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Both put out nice topicals props to both and i felt both had quite a good structure and good usage or wordplay and imagery, i felt that Re$tricted came harder though, his was much more deep and also i liked the way it flowed, Hoops was good but i didnt like 1 paragraph because of the colour he chose. Re$tricted used a nice display of multies as well using double rhymes in his verse that actually made me want to read. Because of this he gets my vote.
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first props to both
Hoops- good drop..not very original though cuz when people think of misunderstood its usually the family and school shit they come up with first but your flow was nice and you had some emotion up in there...stuc was good wasnt all tipsy i like your verse but not an oringal concept...and your vocab was ok R- i felt this verse..and i like the vocab you dropped in it too...it gave it more meaning your struc was nice and it flowed nicely,you also had deeper emotion in your verse nice drop by both Vote-Restricted |
Uppin ~R~ |
Up. Nice verse by both.
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Uppin ~R~ |
Quit Fucking Sleeping...Hit Dis Up ~R~ |
uppinon this battle. dont sleep.. and leave some links
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calamity
you had nice flow and all. you kept ur structure nice ur lines were a lil short ur verse was short and simple you followed a good story line about brittany.. but you seem like u had emotion at first and after you didnt overall 7/10 restricted you had nice flow and better strucutre i liked ur verse u had greater emotion then calamity ..u followed ur storylines but not as well. u won becuz of nearly flawless structure and flow overall 9/10 |
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