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Mr. Goodbar, make you forget where you are like you lost your book mark,
Hood-smart, spit bars like the crips that shot up Suge's car (Too far!)
Non-stop like cumming, Me jumping on top of your foots right bunyan
Got you crying like you was running through a field of endless onions
My lyrics are so sickening they're served with chicken and dumplings
A mad scientist licensed to practice science, form an alliance with cyphering defiance
Burn an MC's ashes into coal buried in the earth's mold, wait a 1000 years to pull out diamonds
A speratic and crazy psychiatric resident of whats left of Iraq' destruction
The MC referred by the President as a Weapon of Mass Destruction
Mixing "M&M's" and "Jin" that's only 63 percent alcohol "Proof",
Lace the drink with "Canibus", "Mix-a-lot" 'till you get "MC Juice"
Write my rhymes in crop circles so MC's can't understand it
No wander why Aliens got pissed off and attacked the planet