another one ahhhhahhhh! pleaz gimme feed back!
 

check it out all ya'll home boi'z and homie gurl'z:::::::::::::::

I was born ready, why you think they call me PRE-phix/
I shred paper so fast the left burnin hotter than Phoenix/
I am so eager and ready to spring into action/
Face me and leave with a worse face-lift than Micheal Jackson/
Come to me whole, we battle and you'll leave with a fraction/
Of the body composion you had prior the my words and wires/
Leavin you on your knee's-n-your screamin' like I left you on fire/
It's like I am sittin in basement thinkin bout' how to disposes of
these bodies and leave them trace-less/ They always die nameless and faceless/ Straight dangerous, ya'll were safe till' I came-with-this/
I have full conversations with freddy and Jason/ They teach me how stop cop from chasin/ And how to keep people livin in fear-of-me/ But somehow the people that I kill are still hear-with-me/ I got a collaberation with Johnny so we keep "shining"/ Sick and tired of hearing on these people whining/ And I cant stop people from looking, they even whisper while I'm dining/ I cant murder them all thats too much to load carry and bury(barry)/ I wanna find my 9mm to end it all, I even find myself a little scary/ The police find me their happy I kno the feelin is mutual (mute-tu-al)/ I wont even have family to go to my funeral/Cuz they are all already lyin next to me/ So when I am dead and gone dont forget my rhyme complexety/

hit me back, lemme kno what ya'll think.
Prephix
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gits! someone gimme feedback, damn!

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^^^ Not to bad for a new b. Yo verse was straight but need to work on yo structure.
separate ya lines so it's easier to read... LIke
flkdjaslfjlsdjflkjdslgjldjglgdjslgkjdljd go/
ldkfjldksjafljdslkfjldsjflkdsjlkfdjslkjf ho/

fdjkslajfdljsodfslkfslkjfldjlfjdskljdlkf no/
dkjfldsjaldfjlksjljflkdjsfljdljflkdjlkdfjk sho/
But you straight

cool, thnx dawg! holla!
Prephix.
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