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Mad Dog 07-10-04 05:45 AM

Best Night Of My Life
 
Ima tell yall about sum shit that went down last year prolly the best night of my life hear me out...

(Verse)
September 1st 2003/
Shit in reality jus another normal day for me/

Woke up and there was a text on my phone/
I remembered givin her my number...
...she asked if i wanted to go to her home/

She broke up wit her ex the night before last i was there to hear it/
I heard she liked me but that werent the reason...
...fact is he treated her like shit/

People could see we clicked...and there was a spark/
I couldnt believe i didnt notice her feelings...
...even when she showed me her birthmark/

It was in a particular area...but i wont say where/
Back to the story i replied back...
...sayin what time should i be there?/

She said come round about 7 my parents are going out/
I need sum company...
...and only u know what im about/

I tried callin her but she werent respondin/
She text dont call i get nervous...
...ur voice starts me gigglin/

So we text all day while the hours past/
I looked at the clock only an hour?...
...why aint the day goin fast?/

Finally 7 came i was at the door my mind constantly thinkin/
I knocked she answered come in watcha drinkin?/

I stood back amazed she dressed up for me...
...but then again we both we lookin smart/
She looked real beautiful...
...i could feel her taking my heart/

We sat in the living room and spoke as we watched sum T.V/
Then i felt her hand reach over startin to touch me/

I responded back the same my heart set on fast beats/
She pulled me over...her head on my lap in the same seats/

My hand was stroking her fine hair What Women Want was on/
I thought nows my chance please dont word it wrong/

I whispered in her ear I know what u want V/
She smiled and said what then...
...i told her u want me/

Then we kissed and our relationship was spawned/
9 months later...our Baby Ethan was born...
...and we still going strong/

Mad Dog 07-12-04 03:35 AM

upin this

Mc DeaTh. 07-12-04 03:40 AM

....
 
shieet mayun that was nyce

yo check mah open mic put sum feedback

eph 07-12-04 04:01 AM

dont come at my hammi like that (z villian)

that was hard respect, my heart came to you on that one...

...producing a baby is the only fulfilling thing that you can ever do, you take this one with a 10/10..


great solid story, good lines, flow was very nice, worplay and the closure was "strong"

rep D2R to the Fullest

Mad Dog 07-12-04 05:17 AM

Thanks a lot dawg that means a lot im uppin this again yall

BIGPAPPA76 07-12-04 09:20 AM

wow man, that shit was hot dawg... great story line and fun to read.. flow was good, real nice man i like that shit..

I stood back amazed she dressed up for me...
...but then again we both we lookin smart/
She looked real beautiful...
...i could feel her taking my heart/

nice verse right there man, real nice... that was my favorite one in it.

good spit

Restricted 07-12-04 09:58 AM

It Was Aight..

Your Vocab and Multi/Flow Isnt All There...But You GOt The StoryLine Down...Just Need To Add The Emotion and Word Usuage To Your Advantage.

Good Job Though...6.5/10

~R~

Know-Gimix 07-12-04 10:47 AM

I really feel the story to this, you can tell it really means somethin to you--- good piece here i like it.... Keep on climbin... 1

YaYo 07-12-04 07:05 PM

dayumm that was nice yo

sporadic 07-14-04 08:44 AM

awww..i like the way this shit was told..putting something as personal as that is alwayz interesting to read..could ov done with a bit more detail you know..shit like..getting dressed b4 going there..trying all diffrent outfits on and that..im sure u see where im cumin from..anyway it was a nice piece hope to see more from you in the future

GrEnAdE 07-16-04 05:57 AM

props...postin personal shit on here,takes guts...

in woz a nice drop.....
sum raw emotion,nice depth to it....gud flow n nice use of multies
keep it up

GrEnAdE 07-16-04 06:05 AM

could sumone drop a vote on dis 2 plz..........

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135238

thanx

Ready 07-16-04 06:11 AM

that was raw 8.5/10

soultress89 07-18-04 07:33 PM

inside stuff
 
undefined :hump: :love: :D hey that was sum romantic stuff ,made my ass wonder for a minute but that was just sum stuff u feel inside.

SkOtEe 07-18-04 07:38 PM

props to you for postin that, not bad either!!


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