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(topical)Da Jokah Vs realmurk
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5 to 40 lines no d.r crew or hate votes explaine votes u spit first no bite / recyclin due 1 hr Topic..Drug Deal Gone Bad |
Drug Deal Gone Bad "realmurk"
I'm filling a lic on my mind
cause my stash empty All I got is my two nines and a bottle of henni I grind so the fiends sniff lines while I supply them wit plenty right now I'm dry cause my dopeman go locked up for 20 I call this new nigga up and tell him I need some raw you now that goodshit to boil up and cook in that glass jar He tell me to meet his contact man late tommorow time is come so I go to the spot wit a new car I borrowed see a dude outside standing so I stops there he like yo homey wait here it's darkout so you now I got my heat near he comeback wit some bags I laugh cause he telling me where the cash? I put that red dot on him and I ain't playing laser tag now he looking mad so I tell him to give me all the coke and the cash this dumb motherfucker had a nerve to pull out his Mag I'n my head i'm like dag I shoot at him but he bust back and gets me bad then a nigga come yelling police wit a badge I stagerdly run to my whip fast BANG!!! :shoot: out of nowhere I get hit wakeup endup in handcuffs in the jakes whip This the real game but I ain't flip so I hope by this story you remember me now I got life wit my nigga doing 20 in a Penatintary |
aight thabold letters iz me and tha unbold iz tha man who bien tha bold with <> these b4 and after then are tha police lets do this...
intro... ayo i play light dese streets up like i was a ar-son-ist// round ma block nigga call me da street phar-ma-sist// Lets goo.. ayo i got waat chu need rite here shorty// well i need a gram of dro but iam a lil short-b// thats koo dawg how much u got// i got $8.50..that gonna get me or not// umm i donno let me see waat i can do// """static sound""" Nigga waat dat i heard..that best not be u// nigga dont worry u kno id stay true..// go to tha chest lemme see if u got a wire na men got ma vest..and i have no fuckin desire// do it fast nigga bfore i start turnin crazy// calm down dawg i kno..please dont betrey me// nigga fuck dat heres da droh..fuckin pay-me ((SIRENZ)) Oh Hell na dawg u done fucked yo life up// wen i get back out..i gon done fuck yo wife up// ((GUN SHOTZ)) now az da po'z take me away i stay steady blastin < FREEZE> 5 years iam a be out nigga..so i stay steady laughin <GET IN THA CAR> and wen i see yo ass nigga iam a be tellin tha thugs aint no copz stoppin me nigga iam still sellin tha drugz e.z nigga |
uppin this muh fuckah dont sleep....
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This a hot ass battle two Bloods wutup !!!vote ya'll
5 star 4 life till I'm gone |
ya'll mufucka's vote on this damn battle please shit uppin for feedback
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This battle wasn't that good aswell, what was a promising topic was ruined. Murk needs to sort his structure out, it was all over the place... looked more like 10 lines stretched to 20. Jokah's was a lot better, but still could be improved. Story tellin was Ok by both of you, but again could be improved. Jokah had the better vocab by far.
v/Jokah Return the Favour Here: http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134328 |
iight thanx uppin this shit yo
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that's your opinion upping for feedback
my structure goes with my style thats how I write I got many styles it was for the topic telling the story betta pimp this how I spit downsouth |
I want some opinons on this battle keep it real and vote on who told the best story
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structure - jokah
flow - jokah creativity - jokah was a weak topical but if u have 2 post a vote for some 1 jokah was always gon get the vote v - jokah drop a vote on this link . http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134062 |
ima hve to vote jokah..........
if it wernt 4 the structure/bad flow... idve gone the ova way cos i actually liked the ova guys story beta but jokah had the more polished verse,beta vocab structuire n flow vote-jokah |
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Alright This Battle Was Aight. You Guys Both Had The Same View On It, No One Had A Twist. That's Aight Though. i Think Both You Guys Got Some Talent. i Think Jokah Took this One Though Cause He Just Had Better Rhymes And Meta's. Murk If YouUsed Some Hard Metas Or Something You Coulda Had This.
Vote = Jokah http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134161 -eB |
man all ya'll motherfuckers don't no what the fuck ya'll reading
my opinon and I now a real rappers opinon would have to be me Da Joka shit was ass he had to explain what the fuck he was going to say putting shit in it like static and sirens can't nobody here that shit if we where battleing face to face or if I had my mic and speakers hooked up I'll fuck him up and whoever on this site want it cause My flo the shit and ya'll now it Bitch |
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