Hip-Hop Deliverin Spirit
 

Im pretty new so plz give me feed bak. i need a crew so if u like me send me a msg. hope u like it.


My microphone has grown out of my wristbone/
I've lost control of my vocal tone, spitting this shit chromed/
I'm possesed by hip-hop delivering spirit/
I fear it because my hand is constantly scribbling lyrics/
I can't eat, or even sleep in my bed/
Tormented because a beat will always creep in my head/
I can't listen to a drum loop without timing it/
Can't hold a conversation without rhyming it/
I walk down the street and my brain's known to rattle/
Because I'm thirsty as hell for a mother fucking battle/
I have no TV, already broke it in three/
Because I turn it on to see another whack mc/
I have lyrics in my head, they always stop and then go/
I constantly daydream about rocking a show/
Write my rhymes all my life as it begins and ends/
Broke as fuck cause I'm always out purchasing pens/

U had some nice lines in there. "Write my rhymes all my life as it begins and ends/
Broke as fuck cause I'm always out purchasing pens/" or "I'm possesed by hip-hop delivering spirit/I fear it because my hand is constantly scribbling lyrics/" thos were nice dawg.But try and use more vocab. try to paint a verbal picture or else peeps wont wanna read. BUT NICE 1ST POST. HOLLA!!!!!
Prephix.
...............ahhhhahhhh!

hey yo prephix can i join ur crew? i will go all out and that was 1 of my weak rymes. i have a much bigger vocab and trust me i use it. so what u think. hit me bak.

hey can i get sum more feedbak plz. maybe u can rate it. i dont care just gimme feedbak.