busta cap
 

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i busta a cap/
in the back/
of this room/
and go boom/
watch you drool/
you think you're cool/
but you're justa fool/
sittin in school/
so here i go/
gonna busta flow/
cuz the call me slow/
and i just bust you cold/
you cant get ahold/
and you just got told/ :shoot:

:thefinger

once u wanna start sounding like a experienced rapper.. try increasing your vocabulary and stop using rhymes like:

[B]*oom
(room/boom)

*ool
(drool/cool/fool/school)[/B]
^that shits wack

try to rhyme words like
creek/sees
shots/tops
shit/thick

shit like that nah mean? when u use room/boom it sounds too much like the same word.. makes your lines lack..

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stick with around 12syllables a line.. give or take.. your lines are way to small..

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learn how to use [B]multis[/B]

like..


[B]back-talk/black-clock[/B]


so use a bar like


[B]i pack n spark n this dark room wita black-clock
act wack, get smacked, doods try n back-talk[/B]

i aint gonan spend time comin up with somethin good.. just want you to get what i mean.. that is a multi notice the two rhymes at the end of each rhyme. black-clock/back-talk

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[B]do those things and work on adding metaphors in your rhymes and you'll start to elevate[/B]


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Ok
 

Ma-fucka thinks he's Yoda or somthin...you aint no danm teacher. Just let the wigga suck. You cant get good...I'mean real good in just one fuckin lesson. Let his ass get beat. Then that will teach him a good lesson.

Somebody want some...shit.