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L.E 07-14-04 01:33 PM

Childhood Memories (Mosiac Collab: Shadow and Limited Edition)
 

Shadow
A'iyo
child hood memories
as i look back wondering bout all the things ive done-
i struggled through hardtimes and lived through fun-
some things were scary......some things were not-
i was mischevious..keyin up carz in the parkin lot-
now i look back on that..... wondering why?-
i coulda did good in school ....if i just tried-
i look back on my child hood.. it getz me mad-
instead of causing trouble..good times i coulda had-
i now look back on my life and its filled with triumph and sorrow-
becuz of actionz then who knows what will happen tomorow-
i coulda been good an my parents woulda thought it was terrific-
im sorry for the things i did but
theres no way to fix it

Limited Edition
A'yo...check it...
Ma memories are cursed in ways that only Hell beholds
I wish I could forget...about the things my past holds
But no...I reflect each and everyday of when I was eight
Why can't things be like then...it must be my fate
I can recall the day perfectly...I was completely free
I wanted everybody's attention...the world was about me
We were going to the city...to the zoo to see the monkeys
Giraffes, bears...I was surprised my mom could stomch me
Everybody is happy...my Grandparents both still alive
I remembered that was the day when I first wished to drive
There is a flash...like I nightmare I sit straight up
Compared to these times now...my happy past...is made up

fluidmoon 07-14-04 01:42 PM

nice drop fellas, every important aspect was present, flow, grammar, structure, this was a very good emotional piece, both your verses complimented eachothers and didnt sway off topic.....i liked this a lot...props to both

L.E 07-15-04 01:00 AM

Thanks...uppin...

shadow 07-15-04 11:28 AM

uppin^^^

L.E 01-15-05 03:24 PM

Wow...this is sooooooooooo old...and it did not recieve shit for feedback...

Kawn Flixx 01-15-05 03:44 PM

Drop A Link to an Open Mic which you left decent feed on soon or this will be closed
I'm sure It will get feed now.Even though its old,I'd appreciate it if you leave links to something you gave feed on.Just to keep the cycle goin feel?


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