MaRVOLOUSJ1009 VS K-swiss *VOTE PPL*
 

aight 10 lines...voter's pleez explain ya shit...and u spittin first dunn i'll drop rite after u lets get it goin

dogg check da fukk in or somthin..................................

yo..i sneeze niggas out like da common cold//as commonly told yo ryhmes are wack an startin ta get old..../niggas like u start recyclin dey flow..an use it on da next mc dat go../fo sho..
compared 2 yo rap game it makes mine look plus size// so when i rip its gone be on da frontlines..ma sick flow i spit gets very scary//da punchlines i spit give 2 obitchuaries..
1 4 yo body/dat got put in uh body bag an 2 4 yo flow dats been spit by many fags..
u already know yo flow aint as sick as mine..
yours gets shielded..
while mine gets da head lines..
so when i spit ma first line//u already know its bed time...
so u might as well give up...
or u gone die tryin..

u aint built 4 u bound da fold,he dont think jay sick dis kidd doubt's da flow-
till my doggs grab dis fag "tie k-swiss up" 2 a tree and just rip out his "sole"*

your a newbie u probly neva seen me let me tell u now da kidd is sicknen-
swiss act up ima shoot at ya "tea" then aim at ya face & give ya "lip-ten"**

i got real thugs dat a run in ya crib & heat u,they keep techs,eagles-
da cop a be like dat "kidd from da 6th sense" he gon say "i see dead ppl"-

i inspire ya sons,but i could tell by punches and wordplay u tired n dumb-
but 1nce i higher da gun,ya chest aint gon "work" rite after i "fire" ya lungs-

look at ya structure damm dogg u could neva say dat marv suck-
ya "reception is down" so pleez dont even "call me" till u get ya "bar's up"-

*=his name is k- swiss and datz a sneaker...u'll get da punch

**=i said tea meanin his tee shirt..and lipten is a tea u'll get da punch ..

vote ppl

uppin 4 votes

good battle

yo marvolous took this hands down, the structure made it easier to read his punches that came hard btw, and the flow was better

vote marv

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can voye on my battles plz

well..i think k-swiss won this...if u gota write out ur puchlines 4 someone 2 understand them then i dont think they should be writin...u get ma vote k-swiss

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^^^^^lmaooooo wow niggaz is retarded on dis site well nun of dem votes count...uppin 4 real votes just explain da shit

Best Lines: opener-
Marv: u aint built 4 u bound da fold,he dont think jay sick dis kidd doubt's da flow-
till my doggs grab dis fag "tie k-swiss up" 2 a tree and just rip out his "sole"*
^lol, and the lines about the structure! Good thing u explained ya punches fa the slow ppl! lol

Best lines: fa k-Swiss was the punch: 1 4 yo body/dat got put in uh body bag an 2 4 yo flow dats been spit by many fags..<not bad fa a punch but work on ya structure plz... u don't need all those slashes and ... You just confuse ppl.

My vote/ Marv> mo' punches, wordplay, betta structure "hands down"

*Y'all could hit up my battles but ain't nobody battlin' me... lol so*
~wun~

goodlookin...more votes ppl and pleez explain da shit or it wont count

MARVolous1009: Good structure, the flow was right on point without a doubt. The opening line was pretty syck. I got it about the shoes and te sole of the shoes, pretty tight. Punches were hittin hard, as their was some personals in there that added...not really any good multies though, might be something to look into next time.

K-swiss: You need to work on ya structure, flow wasnt too bad, but break it down into lines and bars...just cout syllables a lil better...and your flow will be right on point. Punches were aigt...coulda been a lil harder...his came at you harder because he was using more personals. The Metas you were using werent really creative, just look on the bright side a lil more. Not too bad of a verse, Marv just came harder with it.

v/Marvolous1009

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break down

opener:M
punches:M
flow:M
structure:M
vocab:M
wordplay:none
personals:both
closer:M
overall:marvolous

i'll finish my vote when you vote on this
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=134848

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damm dis shit still up here......vote ppl...........................