Dark Path
 

save me lord, guide me thru these hard times, let ur angels encamp around me.....

rocky regions, darken, filled wit the devils legion//
inner grievins, for the souls of sinners and heathens//
my body weakened, I can't take this path on my own//
be bold, know the lord will keep me in a stronghold//
it seems cold, but I continue lookin towards the sun//
to much gore and guns, I'm waitin for the lord to come//
ya hoard ya lungs with smoke, a demon in deguise//
told to prophisize, I got high, had to stop wit mine//
drop the nine, too many kids and bad influences//
be intuitive, only God can help u live lucrative//
saught out the music biz, my path is still far//
internally scared, for rockin my God so hard//
But I play my cards and bow my head wit my eyes closed//
stay on my toes, wit God real close, walkin this rickety road//

i liked this poem man, you had good flow and structure, it was very descriptive and emotional,i thought that it was put together well and the way you rhyme helps to suck the reader in..........nice, keep it up......

nice nice

beautiful I LIKE IT!!!

Yeah, I like it. It seemed more like an OM to me, but it was still very good. Your vocab was nice.. I need to work on that, ha. I'm more of an athiest myself, but I still liked the poem. Good job.

nice drop...had really good imagery and very good vocab...nice emotion in it...brought it all 2gether and it came out nice...peace

good look on the feedback, i appreciate it....

This so damn powerful ,where ya'll get this from ,when you get famous tell them who told you that you was first.

dayum havent been on here for a while but will keep it up dawg

^wtf, yo Will, nice shit. Ur flow was perfect on this one. great vocab and imagination. I give that verse 10 out of 10 for real. U did str8 wit keeping niggaz intact wit wat U feeling at the time. keep it up.