schema vs. SLUGGA
 

10 bars or more
no silly voting shit
due at 1:45

this is my check in

Im Checking In So
U Dont Think Im
Scared Thanks
But It All
War Now

DA GLOCK DONE COMMITED SOME LETHAL SINZ
AND HE STAU ON MY SIDE SO I GOT A LETHAL FRIEND/
IM A REAL NIGGA I'LL MAKE YOU SHIT YA HEART,
AND I GOT ALOT AND I AINT TALKING BOUT FLIPPIN NO CARDS/
IM TALKIN BOUT FLIPPIN YA CAR,
YOU SHOULD CALL LIL FLIP DA WAY I FLIP THESE BARS/
I DONT GOT TO GET SERIOUS IM JUS HAVIN SOME FUN,
LEAVE YA SHIRT RED AND I AINT TALKIN BOUT RUM
SEE IM A TRU SOULJAH,
AND REDRUM SPELLED BACKWORD EQUALS MURDER/
AND THATS WHERE YA HEADED,
AND THIS VERSE GO LEAVE HEADLESS/ :shoot: :help:

some people'll hate me for killin all these noobs like they cattle
but actually this kid was real sure that he wanted this battle

he private messaged me at 6 but then he ducked me till night came
yep this the best he could prewrite in an 8 HOUR TIMEFRAME

why i keep spendin battle credits on these cats that need practice
he wanted to write the full ten BARS but couldnt think of more wackness

i go easy on the herbs...but still im always gon' get-wins
dude cant even speak english take a look at his check-in

no real crew wants him...this "rapperz" rollin "exclusive"
he wants to win a battle....damn those votes are elusive

and aint just me the whole board knows hes that wack
thinks he good...only thing he got on 'lock' is the 'caps'

his whole shit is boring...i cant get past the fourth word-down
if hes from crunkville id hate to see the poor bastard from herb-town

slugga please tell me how you thought this would come out
shoulda battled me at 6.....i coulda won this by now

youve read my battles dog you knew what i could do to you
instead of askin me for beef you should be askin me to tutor you

so after this i might spend time and even help you do well
and you can come back again and battle me in two-thousand twelve

I Ment To Say
I Got Alot Tricks And I Aint Talkin Flippin Cards
But Good Shit Schema
But Lets Get Some Votes

Opening:Schema
Wordplay:Schema
Flow:Schema
Punhes:Schema
Personals:Schema

Do i really have to go on any longer???
V/Schema

aight this was a 1 sided battle the whole way,slugga your verse was pretty simple,some of your lines did'nt ryme n that redrum/murder backwards epitome was lame,bad structure work on your syllable count for better flow,
schema:thought your verse was funny shit,ya had humour in your whole verse n had structure on lock personal punches were alright,n ya dint bother talkin bout gansta shit which was good ta see...
VOTE/SCHEMA
RETURN THE FAVOUR
I NEED SOME SERIOUSLY HONEST "EXPLAINED"VOTES ON THESE:
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134418
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135134

SLUGGA
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...its newbish...dont type in all caps either...cause it looks gay...structure is decent...flow fell off a little...u had no multis...no good wordplay...none of ur punches connected...no good personals...

schema
structure was ok...ur lines were stretched though...flow fell off a little due to the stretchnes...u had a few multis...wordplay was decent...some of ur punches connected...personals were pretty good...

Overall
both had a decent structure...both had an alright flow...schema had more multis...better wordplay...more connecting punches...and better personals...so basing off of that...schema gets my vote...

VOTE - SCHEMA

shchema won.without a doubt..........
slugga weak punches...structure woz fucked
.no wordplay.elevate man

svhema
gud flow/structure
decent wordplay multies
u won coz ur punches were a lot harder
vote-schema

RETURN THA FAV PLZ
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135179

my vote goes to schema, slugga didn't have any punches or personals, and he wasn't consistent with his flow