Excuse Me Miss
 

ballistic charateristics, u saw, but u missed it//
images twisted, eye of beholder, optic linguistic//
blurred vision, physics... drifted a relative velocity//
probably let her go, under pressure like viscosity//
sumthing prompted me, casually approach cautiously//
invade the proximity, her fragrance such divinity//
wats got into me, but I proceed, courtship I anticipate//
suggested and supplicate, so we can formally fornicate//
I pose to form her fate, she back away played complex//
hard to get, so vex, but I continue to conquer concepts//
so obvious, we progressed dialougue like recycled objects//
back and forth process until we agreed on lyrical logic//
one less than octives, she encryted numerical scriptures//
stuck like fixtures, I reigned a victorious victor//

I jus freestyled this real quick... I kinda like it, tell me wat ya think

lots of big word i like

hahhaahaha, goodlook Big.... lookin for more feedback, wat ya'll think

This is what I like seein a fuckin ill verse man/
Wordplay and multis were on point, helpin you make the flow good/
Good imagery in the verse too man, that was a very ill piece/
There isnt much you have to work on/
You got wordplay,multis, flow, and structure down/
Coulda been longer, I give it a 9/10 man/
Keep elevatin/

nice
 

i got to give it up to you, u did well. . . keep it up
try experimentin wid less complex stlyes jus see how it comes out, jus a suggestion.. . . u might like it.
but still i like what ur doin already. . .

thanx peeps, goodlook on the feedback.....

dat shit was decent nova u have been droppin nice lately that piece had great vocab and nice multi's and meta's so keep up da good work and dont forget to return da fav on my piece