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SHY 07-21-04 01:54 PM

The Fact's Of My Life
 
Asi cry and let the tears run down
my heart beats rapidly and head begins to pound
Life suddenly has no meaning to me
and if there is one it's small so i can't see
i have endured alot of hradships
and participated in a lot of relationships
but never have i received and sympathy or remorse
so i shall sit here and alow karma to take her course
looking through my eyes is similar to being blind
because ive bees searching and searching
but it's not love i find
instead it's heartachs and dissapoinment
hatred and emptiness
lonliness and disncontentment
i have a mother but only when she wants to be
she claims she loves me but hasen't proven it to me
i have a father that soen't understand
it's never asking, understanding but rather much a demand
i had a significant other but little did i know
tha the everlasting love would soon surely go
i have friends but what's a friend if they haven't been where ive been
how can we relate if both have a different fate
so now it's just me , my pen , and my pad
how can i be lonly if it's people i never had
what's beauty without a soul
what's lo ve if your heart is cold
as you listen visualize pain, grief, and agony
and if you place a face to these words that would be me
a young woman in distress
a female who's mind, body, and soul is a mess
but just send me a prayer and i will do my best
because i relized all it is is the devil putting me to the test
so just send me a prayer and i will do my best
and if i made it or not i will leave that up to you to guess
The Facts Of My Life.*

G_$peed 07-21-04 03:18 PM

i love it. you werent wrong bout the poet shit.

Phenom-in-all 07-21-04 08:16 PM

Heartfelt fasho - goodlookin. Work on grammer, or spelling though - as some parts were a little harder to flow with cause the word was "and" instead of "any". Was it supposed to be an off syllable count? I don't know alot about poetry - but I know some things I;ve read are not equal to the line previous - and I dont know if thats what you were going for or not. Good lookin anyways - keep droppin.

raw killa 07-22-04 01:53 PM

yea i feel u a 100% on dis drop almost decribes my life keep droppin mami holla

fluidmoon 07-23-04 03:04 PM

this was a good poem, nice deeply emotional words coming thru this piece, and what i liked is that, what u were feeling, i think everyone can relate to at one time or another, nice job and keep it up......


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