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Lethal Lunatic vs WillNova(Topical)
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Subject title: Action Wit Wordz Due in 48hrs after we check in no d/r, crew and hate votes etc |
at the top of the Lincoln memorial ready to give a speach.... as I look to one side I see the black panthas in the kangos, the other side is filled wit Klansmen with white sheets.... I clear my throat nervously before I speak......[/SIZE]
expand vocabulary, offended by vulgarity// create vicious parodies to show similarities// in search for clarity, but the answer seems vague// set the stage, all this fightin, made our own plague// who's to blame, damn shame, are kids took our lead// columbine, snipers, bombs, watch America bleed// voices scream, as we watch these terrorist attacks// towers collaspe, but we still grudge over white and black// ignoring the fact that together we stand strong// niggers and honkies using words to harm// this ya wake up call, get up, ring the alarm// I'm making action wit wordz, ya use action wit arms// forget the norm, let raise average to a higher standard// we live in disgusting manner, lets fight to kill this cancer// it can't hurt, lets try it, fight wit words and not violence// a intellectual lyrical virus to break down the system righteous// now fo a moment of silence, fo the fallen due ignorance// stupidity and negligance, meltin pot, all of us are immagrants// combined were omnipotent, I hate to see separation// next time were here, lets have a mix amost the congregation// [SIZE=2]as I speak the last word I am assinated, the crowd of black panther and KKK members begin riotin and fightin...... I guess peace lives in vain, we can never have actions wit wordz until the earth's dieing day |
Action Wit Wordz
~It’s only action wit words I start off first~ ~My words becomes action since I dealt wit a curse~ ~Wit no point regardless I dont know why I spit this verse~ ~Since I spit in verbs my opponents just seems and looks the worst~ ~Now I got a confessions wit actions and words~ ~Hit bitches wit punches since the day this all occurred~ ~So now this aint a game no more and this is quite not absurd~ ~I didnt come to the game to learn I came to make my words into verbs~ ~Wit words I been cursed that I burn wit fire~ ~Some call me spits wit spills and some call me a liar~ ~I’m king cuz my words are action so now I control the empire~ ~I’m all over the news and the country and universe dont need to hand fliers~ ~Assassinate a kid just by speakin to him~ ~Life and death short to be you speakin of the grim~ ~A punch and hit and get some wins none are pussy wins~ ~I’ll break you into a million pieces the best way possibly bro is limb by limb~ ~I predict wat happens cuz Im the cause of it~ ~Cuz wen I speak it’s all on you bitches like flies on shit~ ~It’s all of this bitch and even more than just a quick lil spit~ ~All of actions, verbs, adjectives and words it sticks on you like a bunch of ticks~ ~Look 20-20 vision still spit spills upon spills~ ~And help the cause of all thrills the kills upon kills~ ~Mind is like a gold mind to find the action you gotta start to drill~ ~I breathe in and out of water I spit in and out of water for this I dont need gills~ ~Bitches scream thugs cries wen bled~ ~I’m the cause and effect I mad the blood shed~ ~My rhymes finds a way in it just drills in ya mothafukin head~ ~Like wen you scream and cry to God sayin why is this motherfuckers dead~ ~This is just a finish to my life of action~ ~Please no photographs please no attractions~ ~No loving wit words I only like the sexual passion~ ~But the rest is over nothin left not even a piece not even a fraction~ ~Criminal wit words dont make it rite~ ~But wit words I fight just to live past each nite~ ~Still hit you wit words even on the internet websites~ ~To live wit actions and words is only wat I feel wat to write~ |
Willanova=ya verse was good man.....ya had some good punches up in there.......ya structre was kinda stretched towards the end though.........you had good use of mulits in the beginnin too good job
Lethal= ya verse was good too.but the punches didnt hit as hard.will beat u becuz he had the good use of multis in it.ya structure was a lil stretched but will still got my vote on this on good job too though return the favor |
close battle lethal got this though easier to read and hit flowed better other guy needed better structure hard to read next time use like 14 font aight
/v lethal |
o yea return the favor drop an honest vote:
once agian very close battle y0 http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=136555 |
WillNova
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...and dont make ur font so big...its mad newbish...structure was alright...flow fell off a little bit...u had some tight multis...ur imagery wasnt very good...emotion was decent...u went about the topic in a weird way...it seemed u fell off of writin with the topic sometimes as well... Lethal Lunatic dont put the ~s at the beginning and end ur lines...we all know when they begin and end, they arent necessary...structure was good...flow was on target...u had a few multis...u had decent imagery...not very good emotion...u went about the topic in a pretty predictable way, but stayed on topic the whole way through... Overall WillNova had more emotion...as well as more multis...Lethal Lunatic had the better structure...the more stable flow...better imagery...and he stayed on topic better...so basing off of that...Lethal Lunatic gets my vote... VOTE - LETHAL LUNATIC |
uppin for some votes will return the favor
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willnova your verse was nice..but you had wack structure and your verse flowed much worse becuz of this you had a nice view and story of this..and in the first part u put imagrey right in my head u fell alittle of at the end with im agrey overall 7.8/10 lethal lunatic you had a truely nice peice you r structure was actually pretty tightness .. your verse floweed much better than his u stayed on topic with good imagrey thats why my vote goes to you..all around better peice 8.3/10 |
WillNova- your topical verse was nice....i was feelin it you stayed on topic n shit...and overall you did farely nice...but your structure wasnt the greastest so you need to fix that up...and your flow was okay not the greastest also....so overall you did well in this tropical...
Lethal Lunatic- your topical verse was so much better i thought...i was feelin it too...you also stayed on topic...AND your structure wasnt bad it was really good and fixed up...so overall i liked your so much better... v/Lethal Lunatic |
uppin for some votes
dont sleep on this |
lets get these votez in people, probably won't et anymore, so uppin fo nuttin
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Uppin for some votes dont sleep on this
will return the favor |
uppin 3-1 me winnnin uppin dont sleep on this
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ok there was think i like and disliked about both verse
both had flow and style but i didn't like lethal's bold words and center. i thought lethal got deeper into it was is good. and he had alot of emotion so i give it to him |
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