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When i started writing this i had the lloyd banks beat from playboy in my head:

when the lights start fadin/
thas when u get dat cravin/
ta get wit ur girl/
and start misbehaven/
but when u come back from tour/
u see shes penetrated/
by a friend u luved and trust/
all of a sudden u get a rush/
makin so much noise/
the neighbors yellin whats the fuss/
they tell homeboy to hush/
and hes asked to leave/
they must be smokin trees/
tells em only in cuffs/
friend says he'll make him/
second later he calls his bluff/
see hes a real man/
other dude is just a punk/
the girl says enough/
his homies chest is gettin puffed/
actin like he's tuff/
he says fuck em both/
goin to his trunk/
he goes and grabs a bat/
his chick's become a ho/
and he aint havin that/
the cheaters are fully dressed/
and now hes back/
says they better go/
before they get cracked/
now cass knows what she loosin/
asks if this it/
cuz this means no cash or cruisen/
says she is his chick/
who is she foolin/
her new man already left/
said she'll make it to him/
if they get in the bed/
she wants to stay rich/
offers to suck his dick/
he suggest his whole clique/
after it happens/
he becomes a prick/
tellin her shes learned a lesson/
and now she need ta get ta steppin/
replies all she has for him is love/
cries about how her and him only fuckd/
cuz of serculatin rumors/
of me at the club/
sayin that he was foolin/
wit sum other girls/
why would he even bother/
when he had her/
said it came from her brother/
and that the chicks had varied/
replies thats as stupid as eric benet/
cheatin on hallie berry/
now she knows she lost the battle/
no longer queen of his castle/
she cries as shes leavin/
his friend returns/
and gloats of the conquest/
now he starts thinkin/
about their next contest/
cuz his dime jus got turned out/
and he looks back on the night and must confess/
the rush of these competitions/
is what hes all about

so jus let me know what you guys think, i mightve slacked off towards the end