I miss you
 

black skies, stormy weather, I'm lost when we're not together
dark eyes, great forever, you're the one that I endeavor
strong love I have for you, baby it will always be true
the dove I saw that flew, was nothing compared to your view
blonde hair, a lovely smile, you were perfect all the while
I'm fair, and never guile, I love you and your girly style
your laugh, intoxicates me, in my slow somberly states
your half grin fluctuates,I love how it moves out of place
just kiss me one more time, I'm sure that it will be sublime
I miss you every rhyme I write and your sweet voice's chime

i liked this a lot, you had nice flow in this poem and it was touching, you really portrayed well, your feelings for this girl in your writing, nice job, it was sweet, keep it up man....

nice flow, very touching to me.. very pretty i must say..
nice use of words and very abstract to a point it's almost concrete..
good job..
~wun~

yea i felt dis shit its hard though 2 write sumtin bout how u feel towards sum1 i dunno bout u but im always afriad 2 say da wrong thing u got skillz keep it up peace out holla