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schema vs. The Black Plague
blind spit
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We both agreed to do it tomorrow, its too damn late..
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Imma treat this kid like salted peanut shells, and get him off my nuts
He been rydin my dick since he been on this site, cuz he got no guts After i merk his ass ya'll know he'll bitch and complain, sayin i pre writ But i already dropped this little dick and jus about half of his clit clique* "Elevator goin up"? Haha, thats cuz this kid's afraid to get on my level Fuckin pussy, i seen more man this mornin in my bowl of fruity pebbles You really think you "lethal"? Kid i'll judge your " Sinz", u can call me god** And send you down here to " hell" where i merk you niggas like its my job He wonders why his battles get slept on... cuz u lull these cats to sleep 6-2, he think he dope, but naw nigga u "got it twisted" like mobb deep I'm KO'in this fool, this the worse a nigga got beatdown since rod King Kid im simply devourin you, eatin you up quickly like hot barbeque wings Man im jus smarter than u, i'd have more brain power if i had a labotemy*** You could spit ya verse 20 mins before me and still not be on top of me * I think i aready beat like 2 cats that are in his crew ** Check his crew name, lethal sins.. and the "hell" part is cuz i say im from hell *** Lobotomys is when u have part of ya brain removed |
i write my raps with wordpad you write yours with search engines
damn how can i change this around so it sounds like i said it your structures fucked and ya rhymes im not feelin watch me wipe this black plague the fuck out like penicillin oh you from hell? tell satan i got some more mc's for 'im nothin personal...i KO all the fake g's on the forum everyone knows the only reason you named after bubonic plague is cause you leakin blood out ya ass down between ya legs the black plague comin back again? shit we didnt see this comin oh thats why his punches so played...hes from the fifteen hundreds i know your not used to gettin l's but have one...its on me kid hold on while i tell datruth that i just merked you worse than he did |
plague=ya shit was good......you had some ok punches up in there.een though ya structre was stretched......so it didnt flow very well but good job
Schema= ya verse was good too........it was repetitive though.........i thought that your punches were betta then plagues.....and ya structure wasnt as stretched so you get the vote here |
my vote goes to Schema also.........
good flow and good punches betta than Plague........ pz ~1~ Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
this was kinda close battle if u wanna look at it like that
schema you had nice structure son ya punches were there and so where ya personals, ya meta's was ok. you could of done better with the punches because you came out hard then fell off, you gotta supply tighter punches Black you had the punches there but ive seen better from you, ya had good personals and good meta's ya structure was ahhh a lil iffy but it got the job done good battle from the both of u it was close but my final vote iz Black |
Uppin for some votes...
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i liked BLACK's punches
but i have 2 give it 2 SCHEMA his verse was a pretty good cum back v/SCHEMA yo vote 4 deez battles amayze vs novakane http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=136749 murda-gram http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=136506 2hard2lose http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=136487 forgotten flow http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=136031 peace |
Eventhough Schema was repetitive I liked his technique. Plague u cud a put it down tighter then u wud a got my vote.
come see minehttp://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=137399 http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=137393 |
I appreciate the votes but please come back and explain them or they'll get DQ'ed
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The Black Plauge
Imma treat this kid like salted peanut shells, and get him off my nuts He been rydin my dick since he been on this site, cuz he got no guts ok... After i merk his ass ya'll know he'll bitch and complain, sayin i pre writ But i already dropped this little dick and jus about half of his clit clique* alright better "Elevator goin up"? Haha, thats cuz this kid's afraid to get on my level Fuckin pussy, i seen more man this mornin in my bowl of fruity pebbles lol alright You really think you "lethal"? Kid i'll judge your " Sinz", u can call me god** And send you down here to " hell" where i merk you niggas like its my job 1st line good 2nd glorification He wonders why his battles get slept on... cuz u lull these cats to sleep 6-2, he think he dope, but naw nigga u "got it twisted" like mobb deep ok I'm KO'in this fool, this the worse a nigga got beatdown since rod King Kid im simply devourin you, eatin you up quickly like hot barbeque wings ummm alright couldve been better Man im jus smarter than u, i'd have more brain power if i had a labotemy*** You could spit ya verse 20 mins before me and still not be on top of me lol good nice drop you fell off in some parts but overall alright drop you had some good punches and personals S i write my raps with wordpad you write yours with search engines damn how can i change this around so it sounds like i said it ummm...sorry but this is wack your structures fucked and ya rhymes im not feelin watch me wipe this black plague the fuck out like penicillin ok oh you from hell? tell satan i got some more mc's for 'im nothin personal...i KO all the fake g's on the forum no punch here everyone knows the only reason you named after bubonic plague is cause you leakin blood out ya ass down between ya legs alright better the black plague comin back again? shit we didnt see this comin oh thats why his punches so played...hes from the fifteen hundreds lol ok i know your not used to gettin l's but have one...its on me kid hold on while i tell datruth that i just merked you worse than he did ok..no punch you only had one bar i liked so the rest of your verse was not that great hardly any punches or personals v/TBP |
When I read Blacks verse I sense laziness alrite he got good personals but in my opinion his rhymes cud've been neater and tighter (ribbon tied in a bow).
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=137393 http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=137399 Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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I LIKE DA WORD PLAY ABOUT DA name black plague n da 15 century disease black plague diss made me give SCHEMA DA BATTLE the black plague comin back again? shit we didnt see this comin oh thats why his punches so played...hes from the fifteen hundreds PLUS DA WAY HE JUST MADE IT ALL FLOW Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
The Black Plague
structure is pretty good...flow is pretty good...u had some good metas...wordplay was alright...some of ur punches connected...decent personals... schema structure is also pretty good...flow was pretty consistent...ur metas werent that good...u attempted wordplay, but some it didnt go to well....a few, at best, of ur punches connected...the whole played/15 hundreds shit is also played...no good personals... Overall both had a good structure...both had a good flow...The Black Plague had more, and better metsa...better wordpaly....more connecting punches...and better personals...so basing off of that...The Black Plague gets my vote... VOTE - THE BLACK PLAGUE |
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