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new hood
iight dis my second open mic so far hope yaw like it... its bout when i moved 2 da burbs....
iight yo yo yo... mama called uhaul, said we out cuz she ready 2 breath im tellin u all, outa my crew i was da 1st eva 2 leave i thought to myself, in da burbs will they have any shit to do moved 2 da burbs, checked my box, aint have shit 2 move, but a playstation 2, cd's, and some otha stuff and a new rep i gotta be tough here to let deez niggas know da hard place that i left... i left for school... dressed tight...hat cocked to the right... then switched it to the left thinkin "theres no gangs here right?" so i stepped to the driveway, no niggas or bitches walkin my way i'm like "no boo,dis shit i aint used 2, i had mad pplz back in my day" i aint here no cars cuz i pumped my headphones loud listinin 2 kanye i'm thinkin now " damn, its alotta niggas i miss looked around at da ppl around me thinkin' "damn these niggas is rich" so i'm walkin spot 2 niggas playin video games gameboy advance, flooded pants, theses niggas is lames. they turn look at me and say hey buddie we're new and i say " me 2, but fuck u, i don't wanna hang wit u 2... so i went 2 school came home it was borin as fuck I thought about it nobody here is anybody worthy of trust so i'm still a hood nigga even though i came up thats based on a true story lol 4 real its all true none of its a lie lethal sinz.... we spit good shit quick.... auido comin' soon so u know how we sound we iz runnin dis shit and runnin yaw shit... 2 da the ground |
uppin 4 votes.... come on niggas i worked hard as hell on dis shit ....
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it was ok not real good too plain but i liked the line where he said im new 2 but fuck u 2 or something like that.that was funny you need more of that in your storys
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u my nigga~~i was feelin sum or it but sum of it i wasnt overall it was sum nice shit~~~IMO
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Damn, I liked this a lot, really comming out of the heart and I could feel the emotion. Ill give you votes for this one.
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uppin 4 more crits.. plz.... plz... crit dis plz..... i worked hard on it...as on all my open mic's
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uppin 4 crits ppl!!!! up up up up up up
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To Simple Use Betta Vocab And Use Multis
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Cuz Structure yo stuff betta. An use a betta vocab. dat wuz kind of lame...............but all in all it wuz ok so keep doin what u do
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it was ok,use better structure and better vocab....keep elevatin
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